"Excuse me, is this Mr. xx's home? Sure enough, he is a "courtesy man" and calls me a four-foot man "sir"! Naturally, I dare not neglect, but also politely responded: "Yes! I am! May I ask who is speaking , please? what can I do for you? "
However, I can't understand the next words on the phone. "Guan Sheng first, hello! I'm the boss of Yueyang Music Station ... Here is the meteor shower on demand for you by all the staff of Yueyang Music Station. Please enjoy it. I wish you a happy birthday and all the best ... "Then, the beautiful melody of Meteor Shower really came over the phone. Damn it! The boss of the music station gave me some songs? Isn't this Arabian Nights plus International Jokes? I'm really confused! It seems that someone is planning something. composition
Huh? Why do I feel that this "boss" sounds so like Jiang Tianya in our class? Yes! The boy must have put a broken tape recorder beside him to make fun of himself ... OK! Troublemaker! See what I'll do to you then! Thought of here, I snapped up the phone.
Then, I played computer. But after a while, the phone rang again. I thought angrily: Jiang Tianya! You are so ignorant! Still trying to fool me? No way! I'm going to play tricks on you! composition
So I picked up the receiver and said, "I'm sorry!" " You have the wrong number, I'm not XX, I'm Zhao Benshan! "
But I never dreamed. This time, it was my father's voice on the phone: "Son, when did we have a Zhao Benshan?" Are you kidding? Dad still has a high fever! "In the face of dad's criticism, I can't help sticking out my tongue.
2. Take the mother-child phone as a clue to start suspense. About 100 word composition, on a dark night, it was stormy outside. At this moment, a general manager's phone rang.
"Ding" and "Ding" At this moment, the assistant who had been waiting for the phone answered the phone. "Hello, I'm XXX's assistant." "Oh, you are an assistant. Give your phone to the manager and let him answer the phone. I am very anxious now. " The woman on the other end of the phone wiped her sweat anxiously. After a while, the general manager was busy and picked up the phone. "Hey, Mom, how are things over there?" Before the mother picked up the phone and said a word, the son heard an "ah" and then the phone hung up.
My son flew to the parking lot, drove at a speed of 90 mph, came to XXX Hospital and found his mother lying on the ground.
Next, think for yourself. I typed out these words one by one. I hope the landlord will give me extra points.
3. The full moon is suitable for clue theme composition.
A student
1, full moon, Huang Cancan, bright. My mother and I sat on the balcony and looked at the moon quietly. Clues stick to the topic, and the plot unfolds in a beautiful situation, which is poetic. )
2. "Remember when you were a child, you went home for the Mid-Autumn Festival? At that time, you pestered grandma all day, which was very naughty. Grandma is so old, she is not only busy worshipping sacrifices, but also taking care of you. She doesn't mind walking with you, making lanterns for you, and setting off fireworks with you at the Mid-Autumn Festival party ... "My mother chanted, her eyes were bright and emotional in the moonlight, which seemed to be full of my childhood memories. (When writing eyes for the first time, expression description and language description are coordinated. Memories of Mid-Autumn Festival are unfolded through the mother's language, which has an effect that direct narration does not have. )
Mother lit the lantern carefully, and the soft light filled the room. Outside the window, the moon is high in the quiet sky, especially round and bright in Huang Cancan. There was silence between heaven and earth. (The clue is slightly changed, which is appropriate. )
4. "I can't go back this Mid-Autumn Festival. Alas, I can't make a phone call. I don't know if grandma remembers hanging lanterns, giving incense to immortals and drying the moon ... "My mother hung lanterns on the door and muttered to herself. Looking at my mother from the side, her eyes have a faint sadness in the bright moonlight. Needless to say, she must be worried about her grandmother who is far away from home. (Writing eyes for the second time, language description and expression description are skillfully matched)
5, the moon is still so round, Huang Cancan, bright. Mother moved the table to the balcony and put the melons and fruits on it. (Use the clue to transition again, repeatedly but not repeatedly. )
6. "The moonlight shines on the ground hall ..." My mother hummed a little song and handed me some incense. "Come on, make a wish, make progress in your studies, and grow up quickly ..." Mom muttered with her hands folded. "This is your grandmother taught me. This is a custom in my hometown. I wish the second half of the year peace and good luck ... "My mother whispered to herself, her eyes were like shining stars, full of hope. (Writing eyes for the third time, expression description and language description complement each other. )
7. The moon is full again. Huang Cancan is bright. Grandma's village finally installed a telephone. (Clues not only have the function of structural transformation, but also show the transformation of time and skillfully transition to the next paragraph. )
8. "Yes, of course. Our family remembers to hang lanterns and worship the moon every year. " Mother walked, her eyes full of joy. "Hey? Is it? Has the land temple moved across the bridge? " "Dad, you also remind mom, don't always smoke, it's bad for your health, and you should wear more clothes when you go out ..." Long-term concern, at this moment, warmed both ends of the phone through invisible waves. (The language is rich in subtext, and the text is concise and meaningful)
Your comments:
General comments:
This paper adopts the structural mode of "a string of beads" and "the moon is round and Huang Cancan is bright"
One sentence not only runs through the full text, but also renders the beautiful atmosphere of Mid-Autumn Festival night. The form shows the idea of composition intuitively, and the content is closely related to the topic. There is the moon everywhere, there is the Mid-Autumn Festival everywhere, there is affection everywhere, and the center is prominent. However, the phrase "full moon, bright Huang Cancan" is a bit dull, which can be appropriately changed to show the change of the situation.
4. Did you write your composition on your mother's phone? That winter, the cold wind roared and a little life came to the world.
Since then, the mother lying in the hospital bed has been happier and sadder. ...
That little life is me. From the moment I was born, "mom" was the first person I saw when I opened my eyes, and "mom" was the first word I said. Since childhood, when have I ever left my mother's care and love? No, my mother has been very worried and concerned about me.
Motherly love is like a glass of pure water. Water is transparent, just like a mother's love without any noise. Water is faint, just like a mother's ordinary or even trivial love. However, when I savor it carefully, the water is sweet.
However, just because maternal love is always with us like water, it is always difficult for us to taste its sweetness. But when my mother left me, I realized the special ingredients of this family. How important family ties are to me!
I remember once... ...
That day, I quarreled with my mother, and finally I shouted to her, "Go away!" " "Soon after, I saw my mother leave and thought she wouldn't come back. I was worried. After listening to my father's words, I realized that during the SARS period, my mother went to see someone else. I cried. On Children's Day, I wore a red scarf to see my mother where she lived. My mother smiled and I bowed my head in shame. I cried again. I was six years old that year.
After that, I never talked back to my mother again.
Every time it's cold, my mother takes out a cotton-padded coat and reluctantly puts it on me. Every time it rains, my mother gives me an umbrella. Every time I get sick, my mother asks me if I am cold or warm. Just as I can't count how many glasses of water I have drunk in my life, how can I count the care my mother gave me? Just like \x09.
I can't live without water, so how can I live without maternal love?
The water of maternal love is inexhaustible, forever!
In late July, my father went to a distant country-Holland on business. I have an appointment with my mother and father to call at three o'clock every afternoon. Dad has not stood me up for more than ten days, but today, why didn't he call? Looking at the clock coming step by step, my mother and I looked at each other and waited quietly for a while. I couldn't sit still, so my mother called. "DuDu, DuDu" is on. "Hi, are you ..." Hey? What is the blunt English coming from the microphone? I picked up the receiver and hung up in a panic.
"What's the matter?" Mother is in a hurry and doesn't know what to do. We waited quietly, waiting for my father's call, but my mother and I were as restless as a tornado. Did dad meet a robber? Or, what's the trouble? Or ... all kinds of guesses, all kinds of possibilities, floating in my mind, dad, what's wrong?
It seems 1 hour has passed, and it seems 1 day has passed. Dad's phone finally came. "how about it? Are you okay? What's the matter ... "When Mom mentioned the phone, she couldn't help asking Dad questions. "No ..." Dad's calm voice came from the microphone, and my hanging heart sank like a reassurance.
It turned out that on that day, my father and several colleagues were going to leave Amsterdam for a small city nearby. They took a taxi to the station, and my father said he would call my mother and me at the station. When I got out of the taxi and went into the station to buy a ticket, my father felt in his pocket and was caught. I left my cell phone in the taxi. It's too late for him to chase out. Dad, they called the relevant department to look for a taxi, but it didn't work. They all thought that the mobile phone must be hopeless. But unexpectedly, the driver found the station and asked them to return their mobile phones. It is said that the driver didn't find the mobile phone at first, but when he sent another passenger away, the mobile phone suddenly rang. As soon as he heard it sounded like Chinese, he thought it was dad and them who dropped it. So I went back to the station to find my father and them. Is it true?/You don't say. /You don't say. What a false alarm! Thanks to the Dutch driver, my mother and I were shocked.
Dad came home and said to my mother and me, "My mobile phone had an exciting trip." Yes, it had an unusual trip, which made my mother and I scared to death and worried to death. Dad's phone, have a nice trip!
6. Narrative with mobile phone as the clue The phenomenon of using mobile phone can be seen everywhere in the streets, shops and parks. Indeed, with the development of wireless communication technology, more and more people use mobile phones. Mobile phones seem to have become an indispensable tool in people's lives. I selected ten households from my neighbors for investigation, and found that all the adults in these ten households use mobile phones, and some have more than one. Half of the children over the age of ten are equipped with mobile phones, and they all like them very much.
This year, my father also bought me a mobile phone. I am so happy that I take it with me when I go out, but a report in the newspaper the other day makes me nervous. The title of that report is "How Harmful Cell Phone Radiation is to Human Body", and it mentioned the harm of cell phone radiation to brain, eyes, heart and other organs. Foreign experts also suspect that a rare brain tumor and eye disease are also caused by long-term use of mobile phones. They also said that the legacy of electromagnetic radiation will continue to accumulate, and after ten to fifteen years, it is likely that there will be more cancer cases caused by the popularity of mobile phones.
Well, then, if we take our mobile phone with us, isn't it equivalent to taking care of a killer who hurts ourselves? I was so scared that I told my parents that we should stop using mobile phones. It's too dangerous to use a mobile phone. However, they say that as a communication tool, the convenience of mobile phone is unparalleled, and people can't avoid it, but we can find the right way to use it to minimize the harm of electromagnetic radiation to human body.
Since then, I have been surfing the Internet every day to find the right way to use my mobile phone. I really don't know when I look at it. I was shocked at first sight. As everyone knows, many practices that we have long been accustomed to are wrong, and some are even quite dangerous. For example, in summer, Amy's aunt will hang her mobile phone on her chest, and then the radio waves will quietly affect her heart and endocrine system; After dialing, we put the phone to our ear and waited for the call, but we didn't know that its radiation was about three times that of standby; Uncle likes to hang his mobile phone around his waist. After a long time, he may not be a father. Chatting on the mobile phone for a long time, always putting it on the pillow when sleeping at night, waiting for them may be the breeding of brain tumors ... these are chilling.
So, what kind of method is correct and effective? Combining my own feelings and relevant information on the Internet, I put forward the following suggestions:
1, don't hang your mobile phone on your chest, especially for people with cardiac insufficiency and arrhythmia.
Don't put your mobile phone on your waist or in your pocket. Put your mobile phone aside in the office, at home or in the car, and put it in your purse when you go out.
Mobile phone radiation is harmful to people's head. We should try not to put our mobile phones near our heads, and don't put them next to pillows when we sleep. We should put it 1 m away from ourselves.
When making a phone call or answering a phone call, it is best to put the phone away from your body and put it in your ear.
5, it is best to answer the phone with the left ear, because the right ear will directly damage the brain.
6. Don't make a phone call when there is only one battery left, because the radiation at this time is 1000 times as usual.
7. Make as few phone calls as possible, and don't chat on your mobile phone.
8. Headphones, especially Bluetooth headsets, can be used to keep radiation away from the brain.
9, careful choice of mobile phones, such as cdma mobile phones than g *** card mobile phone radiation is smaller.
Mobile phone radiation, the harm can not be underestimated. Cell phone radiation, everywhere, all the time. In addition to expecting advanced technology to eliminate radiation, we should also use mobile phones correctly to keep the radiation of mobile phones as far away from our bodies (especially our brains) as possible, thus effectively protecting our health.
7. Narrative using mobile phones as clues can be seen everywhere in the streets, shops and parks. Indeed, with the development of wireless communication technology, more and more people use mobile phones. Mobile phones seem to have become an indispensable tool in people's lives. I selected ten households from my neighbors for investigation, and found that all the adults in these ten households use mobile phones, and some have more than one. Half of the children over the age of ten are equipped with mobile phones, and they all like them very much.
This year, my father also bought me a mobile phone. I am so happy that I take it with me when I go out, but a report in the newspaper the other day makes me nervous. The title of that report is "How Harmful Cell Phone Radiation is to Human Body", and it mentioned the harm of cell phone radiation to brain, eyes, heart and other organs. Foreign experts also suspect that a rare brain tumor and eye disease are also caused by long-term use of mobile phones. They also said that the legacy of electromagnetic radiation will continue to accumulate, and after ten to fifteen years, it is likely that there will be more cancer cases caused by the popularity of mobile phones.
Well, then, if we take our mobile phone with us, isn't it equivalent to taking care of a killer who hurts ourselves? I was so scared that I told my parents that we should stop using mobile phones. It's too dangerous to use a mobile phone. However, they say that as a communication tool, the convenience of mobile phone is unparalleled, and people can't avoid it, but we can find the right way to use it to minimize the harm of electromagnetic radiation to human body.
Since then, I have been surfing the Internet every day to find the right way to use my mobile phone. I really don't know when I look at it. I was shocked at first sight. As everyone knows, many practices that we have long been accustomed to are wrong, and some are even quite dangerous. For example, in summer, Amy's aunt will hang her mobile phone on her chest, and then the radio waves will quietly affect her heart and endocrine system; After dialing, we put the phone to our ear and waited for the call, but we didn't know that its radiation was about three times that of standby; Uncle likes to hang his mobile phone around his waist. After a long time, he may not be a father. Chatting on the mobile phone for a long time, always putting it on the pillow when sleeping at night, waiting for them may be the breeding of brain tumors ... these are chilling.
So, what kind of method is correct and effective? Combining my own feelings and relevant information on the Internet, I put forward the following suggestions:
1, don't hang your mobile phone on your chest, especially for people with cardiac insufficiency and arrhythmia.
Don't put your mobile phone on your waist or in your pocket. Put your mobile phone aside in the office, at home or in the car, and put it in your purse when you go out.
Mobile phone radiation is harmful to people's head. We should try not to put our mobile phones near our heads, and don't put them next to pillows when we sleep. We should put it 1 m away from ourselves.
When making a phone call or answering a phone call, it is best to put the phone away from your body and put it in your ear.
5, it is best to answer the phone with the left ear, because the right ear will directly damage the brain.
6. Don't make a phone call when there is only one battery left, because the radiation at this time is 1000 times as usual.
7. Make as few phone calls as possible, and don't chat on your mobile phone.
8. Headphones, especially Bluetooth headsets, can be used to keep radiation away from the brain.
9, careful choice of mobile phones, such as cdma mobile phones than g *** card mobile phone radiation is smaller.
Mobile phone radiation, the harm can not be underestimated. Cell phone radiation, everywhere, all the time. In addition to expecting advanced technology to eliminate radiation, we should also use mobile phones correctly to keep the radiation of mobile phones as far away from our bodies (especially our brains) as possible, thus effectively protecting our health.
The 8.800-word composition has clues. In the open space of the hospital, there is a bodhi tree, full of happiness and infinite love. It is said that anyone standing under a bodhi tree will get what he wants as long as a leaf falls naturally on him. However, due to the construction of a new clinic building, Gai Lou once needed to shovel down this bodhi tree. At first, only a few patients objected, but when this beautiful legend spread, Gai Lou's suggestion of shoveling trees was opposed by all patients. As a result, the light in the dean's office is always on, and it is difficult to put it out every night. It was not until one autumn many years later that an old man with gray temples came down from the bodhi tree. And there are many people under the tree. Sitting in the chair is an old dean who has already retired. When she was dying, all she asked was to sit under the tree. One, two ... Bodhi leaves fell into her arms, and she died suddenly with them in her arms. Maybe someone knows why this tree has such great value; Maybe someone knows ... but no one knows better than the old dean. It was because she drew the blueprint that the legend about Bodhi was handed down from ancient times.
The old dean is the embodiment of this tree. She kept the tree with her perfect heart, bringing people hope and expectation. The old dean cured the unfortunate people with good intentions, and at the same time cured many dirt in this impetuous world. She is like a big bodhi tree to protect people and purify people's hearts.
In this world, too much love is needed to warm and care for others, and beautiful bodhi leaves are everywhere. On campus, countless gardeners, like angels, are always brewing a loving world and a colorful life. The intimate relationship between teachers and students is the most real and beautiful. Their joys and sorrows depend on their children's growth, and every child's achievement is their happiness and their happiness. Therefore, I believe that if you pay, there will always be a return. ?
I hope the fundraiser of the project will never leave his name, and there is no need to say thank you. I often think that if everyone gives a little love and takes less, the world will be warmer.
Children living in SOS Children's Village will not feel the coming of winter. Life is full of seven colors of sunshine, everyone is wandering between care and love, and no one will think of anything in return. It is a paradise full of love and dust-free, with more desire for peace and no turmoil.
Everyone trades a beautiful smiling face for your most sincere smile and injects all the enthusiasm into your heart, which reminds us of a song: "As long as everyone gives a love, the world will become a beautiful world.
Bodhi leaves are always there, often in every corner of the world. As the writer Qiao Ye said, "The true Buddha is speechless until the most holy is proved. She is the largest bodhi leaf and is auspicious for everyone. "
9. How to write a continuation composition When it comes to "continuation", we must first clarify what is "continuation".
Continuing to write is to continue to make up stories according to the original content. Sometimes, with the origin of the story, follow the train of thought of the story and continue to write its process and results through imagination.
Sometimes, I will tell you the ending of the story and flashback the cause and process of the story. Sometimes, I give you a story, and the article I want to continue writing has a turning point with the original text. This is called reverse continuation.
There is also a continuation, which only tells us a scene, gives the time, place and people, and then continues to write, with a wider range of imagination. In short, the continuation should be based on the clues, scope, characters and the author's ideas provided by the raw materials, and continue to write the development of the story plot and the activities, psychology, language and expressions of the characters, so that the plot of the original text can develop reasonably and form a complete story.
It is important to grasp the center and avoid rambling. So, what should you pay attention to when you continue writing? 1. Read the materials provided to you carefully, think about what is the center of the whole article after the sequel, and expand the wings of imagination according to this center to supplement the development of things and the ending of the story.
When developing imagination, we should pay attention to the following points: ① Imagination should conform to the development of the original text, and people and things should maintain continuity and consistency with the original text. ② Imagination should conform to the reality of life.
Even if it is fictional, its content should be possible in real life, and it is hard to believe that it can't be made up in pursuit of the bizarre twists and turns of the story. The imaginary composition should be integrated with the materials provided, with a clear center, highlighting the key points and writing things clearly in detail.
2. The sequel is connected with the previous article, which is consistent with the plot development and character of the original text. It is reasonable for the story to continue backwards.
3. The language of the sequel should be as consistent as possible with the original in style. After reading a story, continue to write a composition, that is, around the center of the article, add an appropriate paragraph or reasonable plot to the text to connect with real life, extracurricular reading or movie stories.
Continuation can also be combined with our real life, according to the article provided by the teacher at the beginning, with a written continuation; You can also write the continuation and possible ending of the story according to the end of the article. Attention should be paid when continuing to write an article: first, make clear the direction and way of continuing to write according to the beginning, end or other clues provided.
Second, when continuing, the plot development should be logical, the characters' thoughts should be consistent, and the narrative tone should be consistent. Let's take "Pig Eight Rings Eat Watermelon" as an example to talk about how to continue writing.
Synopsis: "Pig Eight Rings Eating Watermelon" is a skimming text, which tells the story of four Tang apprentices on their way to the Western Heaven to learn from the scriptures. Pig is lazy, greedy and steals watermelons. It shows his ridiculous, cute, clumsy and honest character, and also criticizes this selfish, greedy and lazy behavior.
(For the original text, please refer to Lesson 35, Volume 6 of Five-year Primary School Chinese published by People's Education Publishing House. After reading the story of Pig Bajie eating watermelon, the students will definitely think that Pig Bajie is ridiculous. After being teased, do you want to say something to Bajie, or speculate on the story that will happen after Bajie eats watermelon?
Pay attention to the following points when writing this composition: 1. Inherit the above and make a natural transition. In order to make the next story or what we want to say to Bajie lively and interesting, and keep the integrity of the article structure, we should briefly describe Pig Bajie's eating watermelon and his ambivalence at that time, but in order to highlight the key points, this part should be written briefly and naturally transition to the next paragraph. 2, reasonable imagination, lively and interesting, what will happen after Bajie enjoys the sweetness and delicacy of watermelon? Or see this scene, what would you say to Bajie? Students can boldly expand their imagination by combining their own life experiences, and be as reasonable and thorough as possible.
Maybe it's because Pig Eight Rings wolfed down watermelons, only cared about himself and forgot his younger brother, which annoyed Wukong and was teased. On the way back to visit Master, Bajie suddenly had a stomachache, which made him roll all over the floor, hating himself for being greedy. You may say that Bajie deserved it, which makes no sense. Perhaps thinking that Bajie took on all the tasks of going to the Western Heaven to learn Buddhist scriptures in order to punish himself, and then showed his true skills, you might say that this is what disciples should do to honor master; Maybe he thought that Bajie told a story in front of the master and offered a humble apology. After that, he became kind, kind and not greedy. You may say, if you really get rid of the bad habits of laziness and greed, that's great ... students may still have a lot of golden ideas. Let's try to write them out and see who writes them more novel, reasonable and interesting.
3. Set suspense to evoke memories. After all this, is Bajie still selfish, greedy and lazy, or always thinking of others? What kind of image do you want the Eight Rings in your heart to be? I hope the students can imagine boldly, create a brand-new image of Bajie for readers and win their favor. Student Example 1 "Pig Eight Rings Eat Watermelon" The Tang Priest and his disciples passed by a temple, ready to order something to eat, but there was no one inside.
Master had to send the Monkey King to find some wild fruits to fill the machine. Bajie, who is standing by, can't wait, and will follow.
But on the way, Bajie pretended to have a stomachache. Wukong had already seen through Bajie's trick, but he didn't say it, and left despondently. At this time, Pig, who was lying under the tree, was greedy and ate all the watermelons, and found four sufficient reasons to deal with Master, Wukong and Friar Sand.
What I never expected was that Wukong, who came back from picking wild fruits, had seen it clearly. Wukong suddenly let out a cry, and while Pig was in a daze, he turned into a small flying insect and got into Pig's stomach.
After eating the last watermelon, the pig threw away the watermelon skin for fear that the monkey would find out. Then Wukong came to Pig and dragged him to see the master.
On the way back, Bajie fell four times in a row. Wukong thought: this is called self-inflicted.
When he came to the master, Bajie had to tell him the truth with a red face, and everyone laughed. The Monkey King shared the wild fruit with everyone and went on his way after eating.
On the way to the west, Bajie shouted that he had a stomachache. Wukong said humorously, "Stop playing tricks and want to eat watermelon again?" "No, my old pig didn't lie to you."
Bajie said helplessly.
10. There must be a clue to the theme of the sound. The sound of nature is beautiful, the sound of nature is rough, the sound of nature is cheerful and the sound of nature is silent.
In the early morning of spring, the rooster crowed and woke me up. I opened the window with a ping, and the birds were singing beautiful songs on the branches. Hard-working bees are not to be outdone Weng Weng picked up the honey, and the frog with green clothes and big eyes croaked, as if to say: Spring is coming, spring is coming. Sister Swan croaked as if she were having a cordial conversation with the stream.
Cicada cicada cicada cicada cicada cicada singing, as if to say: summer is here, summer is here. The children were having a water fight in the stream, tumbling and swimming to the side. They are very happy. The children clattered away at popsicles. One night, the sudden thunder was terrible and getting louder and louder. How terrible! Raindrops fell on the window. What a beautiful voice!
In autumn, the wind is blowing, the leaves fall to the ground, hissing and hissing, and many small animals are looking for food for winter.
Winter! Aunt came whistling, the north wind was blowing, and a ship was sailing on the ice clearing road, beeping, as if an injured child were saying, who will help me! Happily, we skate on clean ice, which is really interesting. There is another festival in winter, the Winter Olympics. There was a lively sound in the gymnasium. "Wow!" China won again. Cheers, everyone! My father, mother, brother and I all keep warm in the stove. At noon, I play chess with my father. It's really interesting. Knock, knock, knock, knock, knock After the victory, Xiao Ming and I enjoyed ourselves. Finally, we had a reunion dinner.
The voice of nature is always around us. If you look carefully, you can find it.