All that is achieved is success

● A candidate in Ningbo

The door was pushed open and the teacher came into the classroom with a bright red certificate. Is that mine? My heart beat faster, but the teacher gave me someone else's name.

once again, my hopes have failed!

maybe I'm not as sentimental as Lin Daiyu, but I'm not as strong and brave as Li Qingzhao. I only remember one advertising word: I like it, I choose. I like writing. I don't need a reason. Between the lines, I can

express all my feelings without any worries; In the faint ink, I can smell the feelings in my heart. Perhaps my persistence touched my teacher. She encouraged me to take part in various essay competitions many times, but I failed to live up to my expectations and missed the success of < P > again and again!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my dancing style to my heart's content by wearing them. I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet, who could let the poet brew everything in the prosperous Tang Dynasty in cups of daughter red ... However, I don't have all this. I feel like I am on the edge of the beach, trying to move forward, hoping to touch the breath of the sea.

Repeated failures reminded me of giving up, until one day, I saw A Lonely Journey. Du Xiaokang's helplessness deeply touched me, but he created new miracles with innocence. The thorn pierced his foot, but he ran forward step by step! "I laid eggs!" When I saw the affectionate ending, I couldn't help crying ...

I was moved by Du Xiaokang, and his perseverance was passed on to me. So, I held on. Under the light, I kept revising the text, and then kept putting the manuscript in the envelope, sending out my hopes.

Finally, one day, my teacher told me that my film review article "Heroes Are Not Heroes" won the first prize of "Ningbo Composition Competition to commemorate the 71th anniversary of the victory of the Long March". I looked at my article over and over again, stroking the dazzling certificate, and I couldn't help laughing, because I also had a "wonderful pen"!

in the following six months, I published six articles in newspapers and periodicals at one breath!

I looked at the distance with the depth of "looking to the end of the world", with the patience of "my clothes are getting wider and I won't regret it", and with the persistence of "looking for him in many places", I finally saw my light. However, when I looked back, I saw the footprints, which were not perfect, but recorded my sweat and perseverance.

I deeply feel that every step I take, even the smallest, will be a stepping stone to success.

[upgrading ideas] It is reasonable that this article is rated as a second-class volume, both in terms of conception and literary talent. However, the language defects of this article are also obvious: first, the article is intended to affirm the significance of each small step to the success of < P >. The author did not explain and strengthen that "every small step" well, and did not choose a three-dimensional picture to express it when narrating and describing, so the sense of scene naturally became weak. Second, it lacks some necessary means to brighten the language, does not create local language highlights, and does not give the marking teacher a visual impact. Third, the article ends too quickly, and the use of Wang Guowei's words seems a bit far-fetched, intended to get to the point, but actually did not achieve the desired effect < P >. Fourth, the words mastered by the author are obviously not rich enough, so we should use more decorative language to make the language richer and richer.

[upgraded masterpiece]

Successful footnote

● Shen Panpan

"The following students won the prize in the Ningbo live composition competition. Please call the students whose names are on the stage to receive the prize."

There are bright red certificates of honor on the podium table. With the "water advantage" on the first table, I craned my neck and took a hard look. Yes, there are four copies in one * * *.

I think I should have my share. Thought of here, my heart beat a little faster.

However, all the applause belongs to others, and my tears can't help falling!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my moving dancing style with them. I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet. With it, I can brew the prosperous Tang Dynasty in a cup of daughter red. I wish

I had a magic pen of Ma Liang. When I pick it up, I can bring colorful world to my drawing paper and fill it in my words ... However, I don't have all this. I feel like I'm on the edge of the beach, trying to move forward, hoping to touch

the smell of the sea, but I always get huge waves that want to engulf myself when I get close!

maybe I'm not as sentimental as Lin Daiyu, and I'm not as strong and brave as Li Qingzhao. But I can express my feelings between the lines without scruple; You can paint the world in a faint ink fragrance. Perhaps it was my persistence that touched my teacher. Despite my repeated defeats and battles, she encouraged me to take part in various essay competitions, but I failed to live up to my expectations and missed success again and again!

Repeated failures made me think of giving up, until one day, I read A Lonely Journey.

I was shown by Du Wencai.

Zhejiang Wu Weixin

[Replay the real question]

The growth of people is like walking on the beach, and every step forward will leave a footprint. A step in life is sometimes crucial. Morton? Hunter's life-long experience is derived from a personal adventure when he was a child. Taking one step and then taking another step has created his life-long achievements.

Please trace back your life, cut off one or several deeply felt fragments and write an article. It is required to describe the case truly and concretely and reflect one's growth and progress (it can be ideological understanding, moral cultivation, knowledge and skills, physical fitness, etc.). The topic is self-drawn. The number of words is not less than 511.

(composition topic of the p>(2117 senior high school entrance examination in Ningbo, Zhejiang Province)

[Presentation of pathological articles]

All the steps taken were successful

● The door of a candidate in Ningbo was pushed open, and the teacher came into the classroom with a bright red certificate. Is that mine? My heart beat faster, but the teacher gave me someone else's name.

once again, my hopes have failed!

maybe I'm not as sentimental as Lin Daiyu, but I'm not as strong and brave as Li Qingzhao. I only remember one advertising word: I like it, I choose. I like writing. I don't need a reason. Between the lines, I can

express all my feelings without any worries; In the faint ink, I can smell the feelings in my heart. Perhaps my persistence touched my teacher. She encouraged me to take part in various essay competitions many times, but I failed to live up to my expectations and missed the success of < P > again and again!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my dancing style to my heart's content by wearing them. I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet, who could let the poet brew everything in the prosperous Tang Dynasty in cups of daughter red ... However, I don't have all this. I feel like I am on the edge of the beach, trying to move forward, hoping to touch the breath of the sea.

Repeated failures reminded me of giving up, until one day, I saw A Lonely Journey. Du Xiaokang's helplessness deeply touched me, but he created new miracles with innocence. The thorn pierced his foot, but he ran forward step by step! "I laid eggs!" When I saw the affectionate ending, I couldn't help crying ...

I was moved by Du Xiaokang, and his perseverance was passed on to me. So, I held on. Under the light, I kept revising the text, and then kept putting the manuscript in the envelope, sending out my hopes.

Finally, one day, my teacher told me that my film review article "Heroes Are Not Heroes" won the first prize of "Ningbo Composition Competition to commemorate the 71th anniversary of the victory of the Long March". I looked at my article over and over again, stroking the dazzling certificate, and I couldn't help laughing, because I also had a "wonderful pen"!

in the following six months, I published six articles in newspapers and periodicals at one breath!

I looked at the distance with the depth of "looking to the end of the world", with the patience of "my clothes are getting wider and I won't regret it", and with the persistence of "looking for him in many places", I finally saw my light. However, when I looked back, I saw the footprints, which were not perfect, but recorded my sweat and perseverance.

I deeply feel that every step I take, even the smallest, will be a stepping stone to success.

[upgrading ideas] It is reasonable that this article is rated as a second-class volume, both in terms of conception and literary talent. However, the language defects of this article are also obvious: first, the article is intended to affirm the significance of each small step to the success of < P >. The author did not explain and strengthen that "every small step" well, and did not choose a three-dimensional picture to express it when narrating and describing, so the sense of scene naturally became weak. Second, it lacks some necessary means to brighten the language, does not create local language highlights, and does not give the marking teacher a visual impact. Third, the article ends too quickly, and the use of Wang Guowei's words seems a bit far-fetched, intended to get to the point, but actually did not achieve the desired effect < P >. Fourth, the words mastered by the author are obviously not rich enough, so we should use more decorative language to make the language richer and richer.

[upgraded masterpiece]

Successful footnote

● Shen Panpan

"The following students won the prize in the Ningbo live composition competition. Please call the students whose names are on the stage to receive the prize."

There are bright red certificates of honor on the podium table. With the "water advantage" on the first table, I craned my neck and took a hard look. Yes, there are four copies in one * * *.

I think I should have my share. Thought of here, my heart beat a little faster.

However, all the applause belongs to others, and my tears can't help falling!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my moving dancing style with them. I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet. With it, I can brew the prosperous Tang Dynasty in a cup of daughter red. I wish

I had a magic pen of Ma Liang. When I pick it up, I can bring colorful world to my drawing paper and fill it in my words ... However, I don't have all this. I feel like I'm on the edge of the beach, trying to move forward, hoping to touch

the smell of the sea, but I always get huge waves that want to engulf myself when I get close!

maybe I'm not as sentimental as Lin Daiyu, and I'm not as strong and brave as Li Qingzhao. But I can express my feelings between the lines without scruple; You can paint the world in a faint ink fragrance. Perhaps it was my persistence that touched my teacher. Despite my repeated defeats and battles, she encouraged me to take part in various essay competitions, but I failed to live up to my expectations and missed success again and again!

Repeated failures made me think of giving up, until one day, I read A Lonely Journey.

I was shown by Du Wencai.

Zhejiang Wu Weixin

[Replay the real question]

The growth of people is like walking on the beach, and every step forward will leave a footprint. A step in life is sometimes crucial. Morton? Hunter's life-long experience is derived from a personal adventure when he was a child. Taking one step and then taking another step has created his life-long achievements.

Please trace back your life, cut off one or several deeply felt fragments and write an article. It is required to describe the case truly and concretely and reflect one's growth and progress (it can be ideological understanding, moral cultivation, knowledge and skills, physical fitness, etc.). The topic is self-drawn. The number of words is not less than 511.

(composition topic of the p>(2117 senior high school entrance examination in Ningbo, Zhejiang Province)

[Presentation of pathological articles]

All the steps taken were successful

● The door of a candidate in Ningbo was pushed open, and the teacher came into the classroom with a bright red certificate. Is that mine? My heart beat faster, but the teacher gave me someone else's name.

once again, my hopes have failed!

maybe I'm not as sentimental as Lin Daiyu, but I'm not as strong and brave as Li Qingzhao. I only remember one advertising word: I like it, I choose. I like writing. I don't need a reason. Between the lines, I can

express all my feelings without any worries; In the faint ink, I can smell the feelings in my heart. Perhaps my persistence touched my teacher. She encouraged me to take part in various essay competitions many times, but I failed to live up to my expectations and missed the success of < P > again and again!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my dancing style to my heart's content by wearing them. I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet, who could let the poet brew everything in the prosperous Tang Dynasty in cups of daughter red ... However, I don't have all this. I feel like I am on the edge of the beach, trying to move forward, hoping to touch the breath of the sea.

Repeated failures reminded me of giving up, until one day, I saw A Lonely Journey. Du Xiaokang's helplessness deeply touched me, but he created new miracles with innocence. The thorn pierced his foot, but he ran forward step by step! "I laid eggs!" When I saw the affectionate ending, I couldn't help crying ...

I was moved by Du Xiaokang, and his perseverance was passed on to me. So, I held on. Under the light, I kept revising the text, and then kept putting the manuscript in the envelope, sending out my hopes.

Finally, one day, my teacher told me that my film review article "Heroes Are Not Heroes" won the first prize of "Ningbo Composition Competition to commemorate the 71th anniversary of the victory of the Long March". I looked at my article over and over again, stroking the dazzling certificate, and I couldn't help laughing, because I also had a "wonderful pen"!

in the following six months, I published six articles in newspapers and periodicals at one breath!

I looked at the distance with the depth of "looking to the end of the world", with the patience of "my clothes are getting wider and I won't regret it", and with the persistence of "looking for him in many places", I finally saw my light. However, when I looked back, I saw the footprints, which were not perfect, but recorded my sweat and perseverance.

I deeply feel that every step I take, even the smallest, will be a stepping stone to success.

[upgrading ideas] It is reasonable that this article is rated as a second-class volume, both in terms of conception and literary talent. However, the language defects of this article are also obvious: first, the article is intended to affirm the significance of each small step to the success of < P >. The author did not explain and strengthen that "every small step" well, and did not choose a three-dimensional picture to express it when narrating and describing, so the sense of scene naturally became weak. Second, it lacks some necessary means to brighten the language, does not create local language highlights, and does not give the marking teacher a visual impact. Third, the article ends too quickly, and the use of Wang Guowei's words seems a bit far-fetched, intended to get to the point, but actually did not achieve the desired effect < P >. Fourth, the words mastered by the author are obviously not rich enough, so we should use more decorative language to make the language richer and richer.

[upgraded masterpiece]

Successful footnote

● Shen Panpan

"The following students won the prize in the Ningbo live composition competition. Please call the students whose names are on the stage to receive the prize."

There are bright red certificates of honor on the podium table. With the "water advantage" on the first table, I craned my neck and took a hard look. Yes, there are four copies in one * * *.

I think I should have my share. Thought of here, my heart beat a little faster.

However, all the applause belongs to others, and my tears can't help falling!

I wish I had Karen's red dancing shoes. I can show my moving dancing style with them. How I wish I had the wonderful pen of Li Bai, a poet. With it, I can put