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I was young then ... "Teacher Yi Ming's comments and answers.
It's been a long time since Mr. Yi Ming held the third story training camp. I just crustily skin of head and wrote a practical article about how much I love you, and I never wrote again.

It's not that there is no material to write, but that I have no confidence in myself. I always worry about writing badly, because I'm really not good at telling stories. The brain hole is not big enough and the writing is not good enough. Even the best material is as plain as water.

I know it's useless to learn more theoretical knowledge if I never write. Just some time ago, I planned the "Award-winning Essay | Love Story in Youth", so I thought about how to conceive a story to practice my writing.

Just the day before yesterday, I had a rest. I thought hard for a long time in the dormitory and decided to write a secret love story. Of course, the story is fictional, but I am in it and my feelings are real.

This is also emphasized by Mr. Yi Ming in his lectures. Stories and characters can be fictional, but feelings must be true, so that there is a sense of substitution and people feel the same.

After the story and characters are conceived, it is the use of expressions. Teacher Yi Ming said that to write a good story, besides winning by plot, writing is also very important. What I lack is that I don't have my own style of writing.

So I decided to imitate it deliberately. I like the writing of the Year of the Seven Violins very much, and the metaphors used are vivid and appropriate. I read his "Bi Ping Sheng Huan" and extracted nearly a hundred wonderful paragraphs.

In the third and fourth paragraphs, Bi is a teenager ... It is a sentence that I borrowed from the flat ring in the Viola for seven years, and it was slightly modified for my use. If I wanted to, I wouldn't have written such a beautiful sentence.

Unexpectedly, when I sent the article to Mr. Yi Ming and asked him to give me guidance, he was immediately moved by these two natural words. He left a message saying:

And give me a screenshot:

Say:

Later, Mr. Yi Ming not only seriously commented on my article, but also emphatically introduced the well-written paragraphs in my article, which gave me high evaluation and encouragement.

Teacher Yi Ming commented as follows:

first part

the second part

the third part

part four

The fifth part

I honestly answer Yi Ming teacher:

Teacher Yi Ming said:

I replied:

Teacher Yi Ming said:

I said:

Teacher Yi Ming said happily:

I'm also glad to hear what Mr. Yi Ming said. I was very nervous when I first showed it to him, but now I have been recognized by the teacher and my confidence has greatly increased.

So I smiled and said:

Teacher Yi Ming said:

I told Miss Yi Ming:

Teacher Yi Ming said:

I am very happy. It's really written with heart, which really makes people feel that it's a true story and feeling. Through the communication with Yi Ming, I seem to understand what to write next.

To tell the truth, Mr. Yi Ming is a good teacher. He not only speaks well in the course, but also makes people feel like spring breeze in dealing with people. He never gave us pressure, even though we only made a little progress, he praised us without hesitation, which made people more confident.

And when we are in trouble, he always takes pains to enlighten us, learn to meditate, learn to meditate, and believe that all lost things will be compensated to us in another form.

Teacher Yi Ming has taught many students, and many of them have made remarkable achievements. I'm the one who doesn't work hard to publish a book, realize it, and become a professional writer. It's a bit embarrassing to say.

Although everyone's qualifications are different, most people still work hard. No pains, no gains. Where your sweat is spilled, your achievements are there.

Maybe many people, like me, always use my inaction as an excuse to give up. After a long time, it may not work really.

Alas! Lazy cancer patients, hopeless! I hope I can change slowly, I can't succeed, and I can have no regrets!