2014 College Entrance Examination Composition Materials: Continuing to Write a Story

Composition Materials

One cold winter, on the cement steps beside the road, a man with disheveled hair and dirty clothes The dirty tramp ate his lunch box with gusto with a small bottle of bulk liquor. He seemed to have forgotten everything around him and was completely immersed in his own little world. A pedestrian passed by him and felt very sad, so he took out ten yuan and gave it to him. He looked at the almsgiver in surprise, as if he had woken up from a dream. He stopped eating, put down the bottle of wine, and stared blankly at the ten yuan.

Writing requirements: Please draw associations from this material and determine the topic to write an article. You can describe your own or other people's experiences, or you can express your insights and thoughts. You can also start with the material and continue writing a story.

Writing guidance

This is a multi-angle composition material, which can draw different composition centers from different angles.

1. From the perspective of the tramp: Although the tramp is sympathetic, the tramp in the material does not seem to be so. Pay attention to the word "with gusto" and the sentence "completely immersed in your own little world." It can be seen that the homeless man is content with his life and not depressed. This angle reminds us of many versions of the "Looking for Happiness" story (Happiness is in My Heart).

2. From the pedestrian’s perspective: The pedestrian gave ten yuan out of sympathy. The sympathy of the pedestrian is worthy of recognition, but the pedestrian certainly does not know the inner happiness of this homeless man. He certainly had no idea what his act of charity had brought to the homeless man. The truth explained from this perspective is: the relationship between charity and respect for others.

3. From the perspective of the end of the material: At the end of the material, the pedestrian’s charity caused the homeless man to react (or call it thinking). This ending makes necessary preparations for "continuing a story". From this perspective, we should think: How would a homeless person react? What would an angry pedestrian do? Reflect on your own lack of progress and be content with having wine and food for the time being? Thinking about how to take your own life in the future? Continue writing according to this idea. As long as the development of the story is logical, it will also meet the requirements of composition.

4. The purpose of the book is to comprehensively grasp the perspective of the material and grasp the "awakening" and "stunned" ideas of the homeless man: There is still love in the world/There is love in the world/Looking for oneself

Reference sample 1

The weight of ten yuan

The road is very long. Sometimes while walking, I accidentally find myself lost. I wonder if people in the world have the same trance feeling as me? So, let us stop here and think carefully about where we went wrong!

The cold wind is an indifferent and cruel player in this world. It takes away all the warmth, leaving behind the coldness and desolation. People understand its nature, so thickened clothes are a necessary weapon to fight against it. Despite this, the streets are still full of indifference and desolation. It seems that there is always something missing. What is it?

I walked on one side of the pedestrian street, in front of the dazzling display windows. The busy figures of the people on the street were reflected on the transparent glass, in a hurry but not happy. I was thinking and suddenly looked down and saw a homeless man with disheveled hair and dirty clothes on the concrete steps beside the road, eating a box lunch with relish with a small bottle of bulk white wine. He seemed to have forgotten everything around him... I took out ten yuan and gave it to him naturally, but he seemed to wake up from a dream. He just stared at the ten yuan and forgot about the rice and wine in his hands.

What's wrong? I secretly wondered about his state of mind at the moment. Is it too little? But when I saw those hot tears falling from his ferocious face, my thoughts were confused. I leaned over and asked why he was different from other homeless people. Instead of saying thank you or asking for more, he lowered his head and cried. ?

"If you had come three days earlier, my son would not have died..." As he said that, he closed his eyes and drank the liquor in his hand, but his face was full of grief.

Three days earlier, this means... a person like me who took out only ten yuan as it happened disappeared for three days?

The cold wind passed over my body. I don’t know if it was because of the slight trembling when I straightened up after squatting for a while, or because of the extreme cold, or because it was a reflection of my cold heart. I couldn’t tell at the time. My actions were like a gun, shooting into his heart, bringing back painful memories of his family's downfall, the grief of losing his wife and son, and the indifference of the world, which seemed to be poured on him in the cold wind. A basin of cold water chilled him to the bone.

And I was also shot hard, but I was not dead yet and could still bear the weight of the ten yuan in my heart. My way back was filled with the laughter of passers-by. I saw the frivolous smiles on their faces and wondered if I could still smile like them.

How I want to say to the oncoming pedestrians: Please lower your head and look at the depressed homeless man on the steps! What you have to do may be just a small donation! However, I can't do this, because this is not the time, and there is no time like letting them bear the weight of a few yuan in their hearts.

When will the cold wind’s joke end? Should we think about how to walk on this road?

Comments on Excellent Works

"Cold Wind" has a clear image and appropriate use.

It is expanded into a story that one has seen, and is told eloquently. The whole article uses contrast and contrast to make the image vivid; the questions are profound and thought-provoking. It is the best piece of narrative writing in this examination. Rated 52 points.

Reference sample 2

Doing good is a philosophy

In the cold winter, on the concrete steps beside the road, a man tasted liquor with relish and tasted Holding a box lunch, immersed in his own little world, savoring a little bit of meager happiness after experiencing all the suffering. However, that ten-dollar bill was like Satan dragging him from heaven to hell, and gave him two loud slaps: You are just a humble and pitiful beggar!

At that moment, I heard the broken sound, which was still clearly distinguishable in the howling of the cold wind. It was the shattering of self-esteem, the collapse of happiness, and the bitterness that broke through the glass wall in my heart and began to overflow. . All charity comes from the kindness of the heart, but true charity is not charity.

I once saw a story: A businessman gave a dollar to a beggar selling pencils. After leaving, he came back and took away a pencil, and told the beggar: "You and I are both businessmen. I I forgot to take the pencil I bought." A few months later, the businessman met the beggar again at a banquet. By then, the beggar had become a well-dressed and successful businessman. It is respect, not charity. It is like a bright sunshine that penetrates the beggar's heart filled with dark clouds, ignites the torch of self-esteem, and illuminates the way forward.

Just like the pedestrian who handed over ten dollars, we often look at those who are suffering from misfortune with compassion as a savior. Little do we know that our compassionate eyes will pierce their fragile self-esteem like a sharp dagger, cutting them completely to pieces. Until one day, they lose their sense of shame and self-esteem, and truly become beggars who wag their tails and beg for mercy like a bereaved dog. Is it our charity that creates beggars? ! This is an amazing phenomenon worthy of reflection.

You know, the real charity is the girl at the subway station exit taking off her cotton jacket and covering the helpless old man, not the collision of coins in the steel bowl; it is Mother Teresa who is on the verge of death. The patient who died, was rescued from the garbage dump, and had pus all over his body was gently embraced in his arms, letting him feel the last bit of warmth in the world, instead of lamenting for the suffering people in the distance with pity; it was the businessman He took away the pencils he bought and told the beggar that they were also businessmen, not pedestrians using ten yuan to break the peace of the homeless...

Doing good is a philosophy, which comes from kindness and is more needed. Use our intelligence. In fact, its true meaning is just two words: respect.

Comments on Excellent Works

The most attractive part of this article is its profound thoughts, sharp language and complete structure of succession and transition. It reveals the essence of kindness and goes straight to the heart. The writing is concise yet powerful, making it an excellent essay in the examination room. Rated 53 points.