As the saying goes, the article should be the true expression of the author's inner feelings. However, in the usual composition training, students' "second-hand" fake compositions such as plagiarism, imitation and copying abound, and there are still many students whose compositions are disease-free, but few who really feel. The composition of some classes seems to be summarized into several versions, with the same content and no true feelings at all.
Tolstoy said that excellent writers are all written with their own flesh and blood, and sincere articles flow from the author's heart, not forced out. Only when you really move your feelings can you write something with true feelings.
Life is the source of composition, and truth comes from life. Be sincere to life, don't cheat life, because life itself is real.
So how can students write their true feelings? As for the usual teaching practice, the author summarizes the following points: First, feel life and nurture emotions in life. Ye Shengtao said: "Writing is inseparable from life, and to what extent life is enriched, what articles will be made." Mr. Ye Shengtao also said: "Life is like a source, and articles are like a stream. The source is abundant but not exhausted, and the stream naturally flows without rest."
Mr. Ye Shengtao's words vividly illustrate the relationship between life and composition. If we want to grasp the "flow" of composition training, we must draw nutrition and materials from the "source" of life.
Therefore, if students want to write their true feelings in their compositions, they must be taught to face the society, pay attention to life, observe the objective things around them with full enthusiasm and their own unique eyes and perspectives, and establish feelings, and then integrate these feelings into writing and write their own unique experiences, so that the articles written will not be sentimental and infectious. Many things will happen every day of life, of course, some are big and some are small, some are important and some are unimportant, and even some things seem plain and unremarkable. If we don't savor them carefully, maybe they will leave no trace at all, which will lead to nothing to write and nothing to say when writing.
Therefore, teachers should guide students to be a conscientious person and feel life with their heart. Everything is carefully pondered and savored, and often empathy with relatives, friends, teachers, classmates, etc.
Thinking about problems and looking at things from another angle often leads to many unexpected gains. In order to enable students to collect writing materials from life and write articles with true feelings, the author has asked every student to write a weekly diary since the seventh grade. The contents of the weekly diary must be selected from life, and teachers' propositions can also allow students to freely play and write the most impressive things this week.
After three years of uninterrupted training, it has become a pleasure for the author to review the weekly diary, because the students' true temperament and feelings have been revealed in their works, and some students with good Chinese foundation have tried to create immature novels. Every time I arrange a weekly diary, I carefully choose the topic, pay attention to the students' life and inner feelings, and strive to make students have something to write and express every time.
Practice has proved that only by selecting materials from life and letting students tell the truth, express their true feelings and sense of realism in their compositions can students be willing to write and love writing, making writing a part of their spiritual life, which is also an experience for students to learn to be human. Of course, it is by no means an overnight success to let students write good articles with true feelings.
Teachers should cultivate students' good habit of reading more and thinking more, guide students to be conscientious in life, and our writing teaching should be close to students' real life and arouse their inner experience, so that students can write articles with true feelings. The author believes that our writing teaching can only make students grasp the bottom line of expressing their true feelings, so that writing can truly become a spiritual means for students to enrich their emotions, examine themselves and improve themselves.
Second, the cultivation of writing skills After you have writable life materials, the key to writing a good article full of true feelings lies in mastering certain writing skills and artistically processing the materials. There are many ways to process materials. First, we should make rational use of events, select the most typical and representative links in the case as the key points to write in detail, slightly write the minor links, and simply don't write those that have nothing to do with the center.
The kung fu of writing lies in precision, not in abundance, and you can't pile up materials at will, so you should make bold choices and delete useless and redundant ink without mercy. Second, we should properly pave the way and render.
If the same thing happens in different occasions and different backgrounds, it will often have different results, and the writing effect may be very different. This requires us to create the necessary premise or environment for the event.
For example, in Zhu Ziqing's essay "The Back", the plot of his father buying oranges is tear-jerking, because the author portrayed this detail against the background of repeated misfortunes at home, and his father's deep feeling of getting a calf jumped from the paper. While successfully paving the way, don't forget that proper scenery description can often render the atmosphere and subtly contrast the psychology of the characters.
Third, the comprehensive use of various descriptive methods to shape the characters. A successful character image must be flesh and blood, he is an individual in our life, and he should be fully displayed in front of readers.
Through the portraits, language, movements, psychology, demeanor and many other aspects of the characters, readers can feel a vivid and fleshy image. Of course, when describing, we should try our best to grasp the characteristics of the characters and show their distinctive personality. Only with personality can we have vitality.
When we comment on the composition, we usually read some excellent students' works or think there are some typical problems in some aspect. Do we respect the students' personal wishes when reading their works?
The author always looks at students' works from the perspective of appreciation, regardless of the level, after all, it is the hard work of students. Third, encourage and affirm that students have the materials and skills to write true feelings in their compositions. What teachers should do is to encourage students to write true feelings more. Even if he has only one sentence or word worth reading, we should begin to evaluate it by appreciating his sentence and word.
Never comment on students' personality when evaluating. We should respect every child, appreciate every child and take care of children gently.
2. How to write "true feelings" in composition In this class, we will "touch the heartstrings with true feelings" to make the composition show the charm of true feelings. 2. Make clear the learning objectives: (students read) 1, teach students to observe life with emotional eyes and experience the taste of life with their own hearts; 2. Be good at capturing emotional points and learn to describe them in real and delicate details; 3. Improve the ability to master the language and learn to express your true feelings and understanding in your own words. 3. Understanding what is detail description means grasping the subtle and specific typical plots in life or some small things with artistic expression. Some subtle behaviors and actions of characters, as well as scene fragments, etc. There is no doubt that vivid and detailed description has a direct effect on expressing the feelings of the characters. 4. Comparative reading (reading examples and talking about feelings) I asked my father to go back first, and he said that he would go to the opposite platform to quench my thirst. I saw that he had a hard time crossing the railway and buying some oranges, and my tears came down. My father was so kind to me. My father gave me the oranges and left, and my tears came again. Students speak freely. I said, "Dad, you go." He looked out of the car and said, "I'll buy some oranges. You stay here. Don't walk around." I think there are several vendors outside the fence of the platform over there waiting for customers to walk to the platform over there. They have to cross the railway, jump down and climb up. My father is a fat man. Walking there naturally takes some trouble. I was going, but he refused. Wearing a big black jacket and a dark blue cotton gown, it was not difficult to stumble to the railway and lean down slowly, but it was not easy for him to climb the platform over there when he crossed the railway. He climbed it with both hands and his feet shrank up again. His fat body leans slightly to the left, showing signs of hard work. At this moment, I saw his back, and my tears quickly ran down. I quickly wiped away my tears, fearing that he would see me and others would look out again. When he walked back across the railway with his scarlet orange in his arms, he first scattered the orange on the ground, climbed down slowly by himself, and then picked it up. When he and I came here, I quickly helped him to the car and put the orange together. Write over there! " I watched him go out. He took a few steps, turned around and saw me, and said, "Go in, there is no one inside." When his back was mixed with people coming and going, I couldn't find it, so I came in and sat down, and my tears came again. Teacher transition: the true and delicate detail description has always been touching. If Zhu Ziqing's "Back" is touching, Is that my father hobbled across the railway and climbed onto the platform to "buy oranges" for me. Then Luo Zhongli's oil painting "Father" painted the head of an old farmer holding a sea bowl and ready to drink water (1980, when Luo Zhongli created the oil painting "Father", he was still a student in sichuan fine arts institute. At that time, this work participated in the Sichuan Youth Art Exhibition, and "Father" was recognized by many judges of the China Youth Art Exhibition. Then "Father" was awarded the first prize (showing slides). An old bronzed face was full of rut-like wrinkles cultivated by hard years. On this wrinkled face, the smile seemed so reluctant and helpless. He was holding a worn-out tea bowl in his hand. How much rice flour and how much soybean sorghum he had created! Behind him is a piece of golden sweat. 5. The secret of success (group discussion and exchange) How can we capture the details of life? Student 1: Observe life carefully and feel life with your heart. Student 2: Be a conscientious person in life and never let go of every small lens of life. Student 3: Pay attention to accumulation. If there is something moving in life, you should write it down in the form of a diary, so that you won't forget the teacher's saying: Several students speak very well, and every bit of life is the material of our writing. How to describe the truth with real and vivid details from the details? 1. Observe things carefully 2. Select typical details 3. Carefully temper words 4. Cleverly use rhetoric students 1: List the details of life that happened to them and screen out the details that are most worth writing. Students 2. Describe the details from multiple angles and levels. Students 3. Write the seemingly ordinary details of life in concrete and vivid ways. Students 4. Pay attention to writing their true feelings. Cleverly using various rhetorical methods, the teacher said: Well said, as long as we carefully observe life, we will find that there are many small things to write in life. If we can grasp the real and vivid details as much as possible when writing, we can freeze and enlarge them, use various techniques to make the details real, concrete and vivid, try our best to show the truth in the details, and at the same time express our experiences, understandings and sentiments in the most beautiful language. Then our composition is a success. 6. Capture the emotional moment (confession of true feelings) Through the analysis of the details in these materials, we find that the magic of the details in the narrative is amazing. As the saying goes, "Although it is a micro-end skill, it is a top effort." We might as well learn more from the famous writers' writing methods, extend the brush strokes to the bottom of our hearts, choose things that can touch our souls, and move our materials. Refine a fragment, a detail or a sentence into the "emotional point" of the exercise, and write your own true feelings. Teacher: Now we invite some students to read and write the true feelings. The students' work fragments failed in the practice exam, and I walked home dejectedly. I didn't know how to face my mother who worked all day. Although she didn't go to college, she knew the importance of reading. She especially loved reading and often told me some celebrity stories. In order to motivate me to study hard, in my mother's eyes, I am a good student, so she loves me very much. When I think about this, my heart is like a rabbit, pounding. When my mother saw my listless appearance, she seemed to know my heart at once. She came to me, gently stroked my head with her hand and said, "Don't be sad, I failed the exam this time, and there will be another time!" Cheer up and work harder in the future, won't it? Mom believes you! " I feel a warm current flowing in.
3. How to write the true feelings in the composition Before everyone starts writing, I once again emphasize that I should write about my familiar life and express my true feelings. Suddenly, a classmate raised his right hand, puzzled and seriously asked, Teacher, how can I write my true feelings?
I was speechless, yes, how can I write my true feelings? Answering this question is far from being clear in one or two sentences. Education needs an opportunity. I clearly realize that now is a good opportunity for education. I can't prevaricate. That's dereliction of duty. Looking at everyone's eyes, I know that they are equally confused about this issue. Solve doubts-this is a good time!
Under everyone's gaze, I opened a classmate's composition book and said, "Please pay attention to these words":
"I think I should be able to live to 80 years old. If I can really divide part of my life, I am willing to give each of them 40 years of my life for 20 years. They put so much effort into bringing me up, so what's the harm of giving them my life? I have enough time for 40 years. "
This is a passage written by Xiao Wang under the title "Actually, I don't want my grandparents to grow old". Xiao Wang grew up with his grandparents when he was a child. Now, he sees two old people getting older. Their heads are covered with gray hair, wrinkles are more, they eat less, and they don't walk as neatly as in previous years. All this hurts in Xiao Wang's eyes, so he has the above words. Imagine, who can give half of his life to others! Those who deserve our lives must be those who have paid us the equivalent of their lives, and we must have deep feelings for them. In this case, the words written are enough to have true feelings.
If we want to write true feelings, then we must be full of feelings for the object of writing.
I noticed that everyone, including the classmate who raised his hand, was thoughtful and understood. While everyone was writing, I looked through other students' compositions.
"The reason is a puppy that has been with me for three years. I still remember that when I first brought it here, I didn't even open my eyes. When I walked, I shook it like I was going to fall. Later, a little older, always running around me. When I watch TV, it sleeps on my feet. He was so timid that he was afraid of a chicken I had at that time. I never worry that it will be eaten by Yuyou, because Yuyou runs away as soon as he sees it. I go for a walk in the morning, and they follow me left and right, never running around. I trotted up and they ran together; I suddenly stopped, so I can stop without hesitation, and the chicken Dada always falls down because of inertia. At this time, Dada will behave like a very angry person. I will laugh and spit out my tongue to show my happiness. "
Does such writing have true feelings? In my opinion, it counts. In the author's pen, Youyou and Dada have become his two friends, and they have feelings, harmony, tacit understanding and rich life. With this foundation, the words written by the author will flow from the heart. Reading such words, without the slightest affectation, is simple and smooth, as if it were a sense of presence.
I have said this many times, if the words you write can be used to shoot TV series, they are good words because they are alive. Don't worry, all live words have true feelings.
Please read the following text again:
"Primary school is like spring, which gives you a comfortable feeling. You can play football during recess, and you can't help doing those annoying homework during the break. At that time, I was like a bird flying freely in the blue sky, like a happy little fish in the ocean, like a horse galloping freely on the grassland.
"If primary school is like spring, then middle school must be summer.
"In the middle school life like summer, I seem to have become a person in the desert. I can't see green at first sight, and the right to life is no longer in my own hands. Free birds have become trophies of hunters, happy fish have become dried-up fillets on the beach, and galloping horses have become slaves of people. What makes me feel in summer is only fatigue. "
This is a passage from Xiao Mao's "I don't want to grow up". He just went to the first grade, and his homework in primary school was relatively easy. When he entered junior high school, his homework suddenly increased to seven, and his homework also increased a lot. Comparing the two, we naturally have a personal feeling. To concretize feelings, there are vivid metaphors such as spring and summer. Of course, these words also write their own true feelings.
4. How can a composition write true feelings? 1. Careful observation is the golden key to improving writing level.
The article is the product of objective things reflected in the author's head and mind. To reflect the object, it is not necessary to observe the objective things carefully. Only by careful observation, can we find the broken jade from the mineral deposits of life phenomena and grab the shining treasure from the mixed sediment.
If you don't master "observation", the golden key to the door, the "iron gate limit" of the composition will definitely not be crossed. Second, reading more and reading widely is a prerequisite for improving the level of composition.
To write a good article, you must read more books. "Reading is a million volumes, and writing is like a god."
"I am familiar with three Tang poems, and I can't make poems and sing." Mr. Lu Xun also advocated reading more books. "You must pick many flowers like bees, so that you can brew honey. If you bite in one place, your income will be very limited and boring."
We emphasize that we should not only read more, but also read selectively, and even more, we should read in, understand the structural skills and language characteristics of the articles we read, and master the composition from them to be more profound and varied. Third, clever selection of materials and careful selection are accelerators to improve the level of composition.
The requirement of material selection is novelty, and the so-called novelty means that the batch should choose something that ordinary people have never touched, or turn a blind eye to it with profound meaning. Once the author writes in a book, it will make people think deeply about exciting materials.
The angle of material selection should be small, and we should see the big picture from the small, and write materials that are in everyone's eyes and not in everyone's pen. To this end, we must compare, analyze and synthesize all kinds of materials in our minds, remove the rough and extract the fine, and transform and process them. Only in this way can we make the materials novel.
And this kind of active thinking and repeated deliberation is very helpful to improve the level of composition. Fourth, often practicing writing is the key to improving the level of composition.
If you want to enter the door of composition and make continuous progress, it is more important to practice more. As the proverb goes, "It is better to write one article than to read ten articles."
This tells the truth that writing practice produces true knowledge. After learning an article, we understand the structural methods of the article and the writing characteristics of the article, so we must learn to use these knowledge and methods to practice and make it become our own writing ability.
In fact, we can all practice writing after learning the first text. However, fragment practice is a good way to practice writing, which takes a short time and achieves the purpose of practicing writing.
Keeping a diary is also an effective way to practice writing. Keep keeping a diary every day, and then Russian will have a solid foundation. Fifth, diligent revision and repeated revision are catalysts for improving the level of composition.
Revision is an essential step in composition and an effective measure to improve the quality of composition. The predecessors said well, "the article never tires of changing."
"The article was changed." Cao Xueqin wrote A Dream of Red Mansions, which was read for ten years, added and deleted five times, and Tolsiqin's War and Peace was revised seven times. Mr. Lu Xun advocated that "it is no pity to read it at least twice after the decision and try to delete unnecessary words, sentences and paragraphs."
Visible, article revision, generally refers to the process from the first draft to the final draft. When repairing, we should do five things: whether the words are fluent, whether the theme is clear, whether the structure is compact and whether the language is beautiful.
In short, "the article is changed." Generally speaking, articles are always getting better and better, and we should work hard on "revision".
5. The composition "Please use' cherish' as the topic, choose your own theme, and write the true feelings of' me'" has grown up, grown up, have I really grown up? What is it to be grown up? Have your own little world? Do the housework that you can? Is it to shoulder the hopes held by the whole family? Or give up the love you have occupied for many years to others? ..... The road to growth is a vast expanse, but there are too many things in my heart, ups and downs ... Some people say that growth is happy. Because when I grow up, I can be myself, do what I want, and do whatever I want without being oppressed by my parents. Indeed, when I grow up, I have a small room of my own, and my parents can't control what I do in the room. I can draw some terrible pictures. I can play some boring house by myself and talk to myself, which is impossible; I can cry, scream, get angry, be moody and cry wolf; I can also play music tapes loudly and show my "wonderful" voice loudly ... Here, I can fully release my feelings and turn my anger into happiness. Happiness is actually everywhere, and it is better to say that I am looking for it than to meet it, because the happy elf is at my side. If I do a light lifting a finger, my elders will be very happy, and it will be said that I have grown up. At that time, When grandma next door meets me, she always praises me, admiring that grandma has such a capable little helper around her, which blows me to the sky. Growing up is happy, but it is also annoying in many cases. This is not the case. The annoying thing has appeared again-just after "growing up", I fell into the abyss. Alas, the tables have turned. When I grew up, all my love was given to me at the same time I'm so overbearing that I won't fight. Think about it, too. I used to be loved by thousands of people, but now I take turns to listen to her. That's a "tragedy"! Seeing the way she said "the wind is the wind, and the rain is the rain", I have to endure it for a while. When I grow up, I have more troubles than that. When I grow up, I am accepting the test of my parents' independent life in the future. I have to wash my clothes by myself. After this, I have to ... Oh, my God! Whether the road to growth is happiness or trouble, the key lies in myself. I will master the boat of growth so that it will not rise and fall because of happiness and sink because of trouble! Answer the report. If satisfied, please adopt O (∩ _ ∩) O.
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