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Read the following text and write as required. (60 points)

People will meet, but mountains will not. Meeting others may be an emotional comfort; Meeting nature may be a baptism of the soul; Meeting books may be a spiritual edification; Meeting with history may be a spiritual sublimation ... one day, it will touch our heartstrings and warm our lives.

Please write an article based on your own life experience and personal experience, with the topic of "Seeing each other late and being warm as spring".

Requirements: ① Style is not limited, except poetry; ② No less than 600 words; (3) There must be no real place names, school names and names in the text; ④ Writing should be correct, standardized and beautiful.

Real problem solving

20 15 Nantong senior high school entrance examination Chinese composition continues the previous poetic, warm and easy-to-write characteristics. This proposition is not only open to a certain extent, allowing students to freely choose and express their experiences and thoughts on nature, society and life, but also closed to a certain extent. Students must make clear the contents of "one meeting" and "one warmth" and their connection before and after.

Examine the meaning of the question and grasp it accurately. The topic continues the style of Nantong senior high school entrance examination composition proposition, which consists of three parts: introduction, proposition and requirement. The "Introduction" part leads to and "demonstrates" the possible object of "meeting" and the possible connotation of "warmth" with poetic strokes and total scores. Therefore, people, nature, reading and history can all be used as the categories of material selection. It is worth noting that "warmth" must be related to the author's inner emotional experience and growth perception. "Meeting once" focuses on external experience; "A warmth" is implemented in the inner experience. It can be seen that the composition proposition pays attention to the orientation of "having me". What is worth noting in the "requirements" part is that "except poetry, the style is not limited". In fact, the phrase "for a while" in this proposition has already involved narrative elements such as time and place, so it can be seen that this proposition has internally stipulated narrative as the basic style.

Seek truth from facts and write about yourself. When marking papers, it is found that many candidates are not clear about "who they met" and "what warmth they got", which is specious and even puzzling. This is not desirable. Specifying the proposition is a link that must be implemented in the process of examining the topic, selecting materials and formulating ideas. For example, when writing "Meeting others is an emotional comfort", we must first make it clear: when, where and under what circumstances I will meet with whom, so that I can get emotional comfort. Only specific propositions can be considered as a reasonable transformation from "composition proposition" to "my composition". If you do this, you will get a basic score. On this basis, if the candidates make personalized consideration in terms of material selection and conception, the grade and depth of the composition will be improved quickly. For example, materials that care about and help crash should be carefully selected. Good composition questions can often awaken candidates' desire to tell the truth and express their true feelings. The composition proposition of Nantong senior high school entrance examination has always had such characteristics. You should choose the most touching, emotional and familiar material in your life, which can be written seriously and realistically. Attention should be paid to several groups of relationships when conceiving: first, the comparison before and after meeting; The second is the internal relationship between the narrative description of this "one encounter" and the lyrical discussion of "a piece of warmth" and its detailed handling relationship. In writing, "a meeting" should be described on the basis of narration, and the description should be sufficient; We should properly and naturally express our inner feelings (warmth). In addition to emotional experience, we should pay more attention to more "advanced" inner experiences such as ideological enlightenment and spiritual guidance, and express them deeply.

From the above analysis, we can see that the composition questions of Nantong senior high school entrance examination will still be dominated by all propositions, and will still be oriented by life and personal experience. Candidates should pay attention to accumulating rich and varied life materials and rich and profound inner experiences.

Deliberate breakthrough

The best idea

Intention extension writing

Meeting with familiar people or things is a new warmth.

In a specific situation, meet people or things you know before, find their special external performance and internal temperament, and then get an inner experience that has never been seen before. Written meetings and experiences should be written in comparison with past situations and experiences.

Meeting a brand-new object, a unique warmth.

For example, when you meet a book, you should write down the specific situation and far-reaching influence of your knowledge cultivation, ideological enlightenment and spiritual enjoyment. When writing, you should make necessary introductions to the basic contents of the book, but not too much. You should pay attention to your harvest.

Excellent works on the same theme

Highlights of the soundtrack: novel materials and profound thoughts.

Meeting once is warm.

Catch the moon, clean the stars, drink to grandpa and drink a bowl of hometown wine.

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I stood up slowly with one hand, but I was still stunned by the upwelling blood. Grandpa put down the wine bowl, came over and patted my calf a few times, smiled gently and said in a low-resolution voice, "I'm crazy."

On the night of power failure, the candlelight that sneaked out of the house crept quietly on the ground and flowed lightly with the moonlight.

As soon as I turned around, I met a long-lost friend and a lovely hometown.

After harvesting the wheat, the field was quiet. The neighbor's dog seems to have found its owner flashing his eyes in the dark and running wildly in the field while enjoying the cool air. Their faint cries from time to time always attract a burst of laughter from someone in the dark. The breeze blows gently across the fields and caresses my tired and dry heart because of my studies.

Mom and grandma peeled soybeans, and grandpa and dad sat at the table with bare arms and continued to drink and chew. Grandpa took a sip of rice wine: "You came back during the busy farming season, which helped a lot. I will be alone in a few days. " You do your thing. "Dad quickly replied," Dad, don't be too tired. The construction site is really busy these days. The child has a holiday these two days, so let her stay for two more days. Help, too "In the dim light, the silhouette of father and son is clear and ethereal, as if it coincides with a fragment in memory many years ago. Warm, beautiful and fragile.

Suddenly found that our hometown is our rear area. My boarding days at school and boring online chatting in my new house in the city were eclipsed by the blackout in my hometown. Here, the happy days of Shui Piao in the river, the days of working with my grandfather in the field and destroying things, and the days of listening to grandma's endless stories about immortals and ghosts all seem to shine in the depths of dusty hearts.

The moonlight seems brighter. The river flows quietly beside the house, flowing to the distant rivers, and it seems like a thousand turns, calling the children back to their hometown.

"Grandpa, please take five days off this time, and I'll help you."

A burst of laughter, like an old tree shaking its leaves: "Our granddaughter has grown up!" " "

In a trance, I felt the love buried in my blood many years ago. It's like washing away the moonlight from my childhood hometown. The fields are empty and the rivers are clear.

My hometown, this casual meeting made me fall in love with you again. How many vicissitudes and years have the air experienced, the pure warmth that I didn't care about.

Scoring perspective:

The unique choice of materials. With the rapid development of urbanization today, paying attention to urban and rural changes and people's lives should be the first choice for many students. Because writing is closest to life and writing is closest to people's hearts. The author described an experience of meeting the scenery and people in his hometown, discovered the tranquility, nature and simplicity of his hometown, and expressed his sincere feelings of loving his hometown and relatives.

Deeply conceived. In this paper, the author consciously compares the past and the present, urban and rural areas, and highlights the sense of urgency and urgency of the times, inadvertently increasing the breadth and depth of the exercise.

Marking score: 57 points for the first-level composition.

Highlights: Delicate description, showing taste.

Meeting once is warm.

Jiang Yuqi

It never stops raining. It hasn't cleared up since last week's holiday. So on a sunny day, I packed up my wet mood and rushed to the book city.

Perhaps because of the excitement of the crowd, I can't help feeling better.

Those beautiful books always fascinate me. Throughout the afternoon, even at two o'clock in the sweltering afternoon, I was awake with a thick book, watching waves of people running around, bringing strange scenes, and the stories of meeting them always made me feel something.

An hour or two passed quickly. It's getting gloomy, as if it's going to rain again. I didn't notice a pile of books in my hand until now. There is only one word-weight. Maybe it's intuition. I have guessed that the money in my pocket is definitely not enough to pay for these books, so I gave up some decisively. Although reluctant, I still have mixed feelings. Went to the front desk. Before the bustling crowd quickly dispersed, I piled the books firmly on the counter. The salesman gave an official smile.

With a beep, the numbers on the screen are constantly beating and renovating, which stimulates my nerves. Finally stopped at a number I expected.

"Hello, 13 1 yuan." The soft female voice suddenly interrupted my depression.

It's over. -That's what I thought.

The clerk's black clothes and hair dangled in front of me, making me dizzy. Under her eyes, some freckled skin tugged at the wrinkles around her eyes and laughed wildly. I hesitated for a moment and pulled out the cheapest one from under the pile of books: "Can I ..."

From the smile on her lips, you can see that she has discovered my intention.

I looked down guiltily, and my hot cheeks never calmed down. The moment I saw the first page of this book called Meeting, I made up my mind to buy it. "Can I return this?" I looked up and looked her in the eye. I held the book tightly, as if it were going to hurt.

"Well, I'll give you a discount." She blinked a few times without hesitation, and with the tapping of the keyboard, the numbers on the screen were updated to what I could bear.

"Ah?" I was afraid I would hear wrong, so I asked, "What?"

She nodded: "I have already given you a discount."

"Thank you! Thank you. " After paying my only money, I quickly picked up the book and walked out with my head down, but my heart was as bright as the sunshine outside.

Her face is normal, but her smile is unique and warm. So many years, so many people, can't meet. This person, this accidental meeting, this beautiful perfection, brought me precious warmth.

Scoring perspective:

Delicate description. First of all, the clever use of environmental description runs through the whole text, which not only explains the weather changes in the outside world, but also implies the psychological changes of the characters, adding a sense of atmosphere to the event. Secondly, the characters are vivid. A description of the salesperson's appearance, manners, actions, language, etc. It is meticulous and personalized; The description of the author's own psychological changes is accurate and appropriate, and there are various ways.

Show taste. This paper chooses buying books as the main content to write, on the one hand, it is to write about the love and enjoyment of books, on the other hand, it is to show the good heart of book lovers of sales staff. The integration of the two will undoubtedly enhance the taste of the works and win the favor of the marking teachers.

Marking score: 55 points for a class.

Highlights: profound connotation and beautiful language.

Meeting once is warm.

He tianci

Holding a wisp of ink and smiling safely, listening to the sound of the wind blowing in my heart. That paper, that pen, that force warmed my memory after meeting them.

The setting sun shone faintly out of the window, and the rosy sunset dyed the pen copybook spread out in front of me into flowing gold. The mottled light shines on the "failure" that I ruthlessly tore up and kneaded into a ball. Collapsed on the table, I stared at the copybook and the pen in my hand, secretly complaining. I have written so much, and none of them satisfy me. The ticking of the clock in the ear and the sound in the ear suddenly turned black. The cool evening breeze blows the curtains, and I have a faint headache under the lamp. "Can't continue to drag on!" I gave myself orders. So I reluctantly straightened up, wrote, sucked the ink, wiped it carefully, smoothed the paper blown by the wind and began to write. Pick up the pen, black ink slowly poured on the paper; Pen, soft lines suddenly thin; When I close my pen, I carefully close my wrist to make it just right and not slow down. I read the copybook with great exuberance. I just want to carefully observe every stroke, when to start, when to collect it, and where to collect it in Jiugongge, because too many failures don't allow me to be tired anymore.

I heard a lot of people say that clear pronunciation and mellow voice. It finally came true on me, a perfectionist. Take a deep breath and observe the structure of each word as before. The pen tip is light, even if it is hard to write. As easy as lifting weights, this sentence is realistically fulfilled on me. In a trance, I feel that every word I write is like a dark butterfly, coming at me. Yes, when a person is too involved, it seems that he has forgotten the helplessness at the beginning. Not as square as I expected, but more handsome, handsome or elegant. I began to believe that this was not a task, but a job.

Because I vent my feelings on paper. It is complicated and changeable. A little description, a little cooperation, smells not very good ink, paper and pen have a kind of encounter that penetrates the back of the paper, and also let me meet my true self when I meet calligraphy.

I wrote on the paper: "Busy, the Millennium Monument of Yi Tuo, but it is difficult to unfold your beauty." When did I start to be less afraid of writing? Since when will I look at those paintings and calligraphy works that I once hated so much with appreciation? Maybe it was that meeting. It taught me that nothing is impossible; It makes me understand that if you put too much sweat behind every job, you may have the same tangled experience as me.

I have read the stories of calligraphers such as Wang Xianzhi and Huai Su who practiced calligraphy hard, but my persistence is nothing to them. I like Feng Zikai's words very much: "Don't be confused by your own heart, don't be confused by your own feelings. Not afraid of the future, not thinking about the past. So, all right. " Yes, that's why calligraphy has brought me a coolness, a whiteness and a picturesque sharing, and my mood has been quietly changed.

A pen, a heart, an ink and a flying flower. I planted my mood in words, looking forward to watering gorgeous flowers with sweat. Those days when I carefully wrote down every word were warm as light, beautiful in my life, and slightly intoxicated with a season of youth. I will always cherish this warmth and be the truest and most unyielding self.

Scoring perspective:

The inside information is very deep. It takes some courage to choose materials close to calligraphy for the composition in the examination room. The young author not only described his experience and feelings of practicing calligraphy for the first time, but also naturally interspersed his own historical materials and understanding of calligraphy in his works, which shows that he really works hard at ordinary times. The so-called profound connotation in the exam composition must come from the accumulation of young authors for many years and cannot be reflected through other channels.

Beautiful language. Whether descriptive or lyrical, young writers pay attention to aesthetic expression. For example, at the end of this sentence: "The days when I wrote every word with my heart were warm as light, beautiful in my life, and slightly intoxicated with the youth of a season." The use of rhetoric and clever use of verbs vividly shows the far-reaching influence of that meeting, which is pleasing to read.

Marking score: 58 points in the first class.