On the afternoon of March 28th, I came to Beihai Park.
As soon as I entered the park gate, the first thing I jumped into my eyes was Qiongdao, surrounded by green lakes. There stands a tall and beautiful white tower on the island.
With joy, I walked quickly to Baita with three or five groups of tourists. Pass through Zhengjue Hall and bypass Pu An Hall; I left a tree and I stepped on the steps. Soon reached the peak of Qiongdao-Baita.
Standing under the newly decorated white tower, bathed in the warm sunshine in early spring, I feel relaxed and happy in the face of the humid and pleasant spring breeze. Looking around, I saw that all the willows in the park spit out their buds, and all the willow branches danced with the warm spring breeze; Pines and cypresses are sometimes laughed and whispered by the slow spring breeze, pink wild peaches are full of flowers, delicate yellow winter jasmine is in full bloom, and magnolia is in bud; A burst of flowers is refreshing, and a tree of flowers adds a lot of poetry and painting to Beihai in early spring. From a distance, the magnificent Forbidden City complex, the magnificent Tiananmen Square, the tall and brand-new buildings and the jade belt-like roads are all vivid.
Looking at all this in front of me, my heart is full of ups and downs, and my thoughts are myriad: Beihai was originally the imperial garden of feudal emperors in Liao, Jin, Yuan, Ming and Qing dynasties. In the dark old society, the working people had only the bitterness and hard work of construction, but no freedom to play. At that time, when people passed by Beihai Park, they could only see the white tower standing tall in Beihai, and they could only hear the deep crying of Beihai Lake. Today, Beihai has become a people's park, and our mood is like the lake in Beihai fluctuating with the wind. ...
After going down the mountain, I walked slowly along the lake and continued to enjoy the beautiful and charming scenery of Beihai in early spring. Spring breeze blows across the lake, bringing moist and fresh air; I remembered a landscape by the lake. I gulped the fresh air and greedily looked at the moving scenery: the grass on the shore had just arched out of the land, and the branches hanging from the black willow brushed my cheek from time to time. Under the sunshine, the lake was silvery and several boats rippled with the wind. Ancient buildings such as Wulong Pavilion, Wanfulou, Tang Yilan, Ai 'an Temple and Guanglintang are reflected in the waves in the mountains, with beautiful scenery and unique features.
Along the path, I came to the well-known Kowloon Wall, with nine dragons carved on both sides. The pattern is beautiful and generous, the colors are very harmonious, and even the pattern next to the pattern is beautifully carved. Nine carved dragons have different colors and postures, and they look lifelike. The exquisite carving of the Nine Dragon Wall fully shows the outstanding wisdom and talent of the ancient working people in China.
When the sun was about to set, I reluctantly bid farewell to Beihai Park in early spring. Beihai Park in early spring is really beautiful, but what is more beautiful is the people who bring spring scenery to Beihai Park.
[brief comment]
This article is mainly about the narrative of scenery and travel.
As soon as I entered the park gate, I saw a tall and beautiful white tower. I couldn't restrain my joy and soon reached the bottom of the white tower. Looking around, the author described the scenery near and far, and the rich associations arising from it. Then, after going down the mountain, I enjoyed the beautiful and charming scenery of the North Sea in early spring along the lake, and also described the Nine Dragons Wall. Finally, I wrote that the sun went down and bid farewell to Beihai Park. The author arranges the materials and the destination of the trip in chronological order. Appropriate details, lyricism, narration and description. In particular, the author is good at using description, which is not only rich in vocabulary, but also vivid and full of aesthetic feeling.
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Learn to be whimsical
On the long road of life, our young minds have a lot to load, learn to study, learn to rest, learn to face setbacks, learn to enjoy life ... but please don't forget a compulsory course for young us-learn to be whimsical.
Nowadays, whimsy is full of arrogance. Facing the "cramming" education method, listening to the teacher's reprimand, whimsy has almost become our forbidden area. When a novel idea pops out of my mind, a simple "whimsy" will tie it to a big stone and sink into the deep sea.
Can't we just stick to the rules, complain about others and blindly follow those inherent statements? No, we don't need a bunch of idiots who just nod yes. Our country, our people and our construction need such fantastic ideas!
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2 Excellent full marks for composition appreciation in senior high school entrance examination (3)
Who said that whimsy is destined to be whimsical? No, look at these living examples! Aristotle's "geocentric theory" was regarded as an unshakable truth by the feudal church, and Copernicus put forward "Heliocentrism" in a whimsical way, which opened a new world of astronomical science. China's "poor oil theory" made China silently endure the unfair treatment of importing foreign oil. It was Li Siguang's "whimsical" geological research that discovered China's rich oil treasures. A century ago, "the Goddess Chang'e flying to the moon" was only regarded as an "absurd" beautiful myth. Now, people can stand on the moon and smile at the earth. Looking at today's increasingly prosperous Hong Kong and Macao, who will question Grandpa Deng Xiaoping's "one country, two systems"? At the beginning of the founding of the People's Republic of China, who wouldn't think that the prosperity of the motherland today was "whimsical"? In fact, however, China has stood in the forest of today's world, and the sound of sleeping lions awakening everywhere is awe-inspiring.
There is nothing wrong with being whimsical. We should all learn such fantastic ideas. Although our whimsy is likely to become an after-dinner joke that people despise, it is hard to say that it will not become the eighth wonder of the world.
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In the days of welcoming the senior high school entrance examination
It says on the blackboard: 10 days before the senior high school entrance examination. Students in Grade Three live in a tense atmosphere all day. "Licorice", "Chrysanthemum" and "Sun God" are popular on campus in June, which is accompanied by our graduation day.
Approaching graduation means that the senior high school entrance examination is coming, and everyone has no time to be sentimental, because life needs us to struggle and struggle! However, I was disheartened and fell into the shadow of failing the exam. After receiving the teacher's thin report card, my enthusiasm suddenly dropped to zero. A month's effort, just for such a result, is too unexpected. I smiled numbly and recalled the past: for my "key point", my mother cooked for me from morning till night and designed recipes; Father insisted on sitting at the table every night to "accompany"; Relatives and friends who are far away from home regularly call and write letters to care about my study and health; Teachers often use their leisure time to help me analyze and explain a problem I don't understand; My classmates kindly changed seats with me, fearing that I would fall behind in my homework because of myopia ... They have paid so much, but I am ashamed to repay them with such achievements. However, it's not that I don't work hard! How many cold nights, I studied hard under that lonely lamp. Thought of here, my tears can't help rolling down with grievances. "XXX, what's wrong?" The teacher looked at me kindly. "It's hard to get a bad test, isn't it?" I nodded gently. "The teacher knows that you have tried your best. I analyzed your test paper just now. You should remember: success or failure belongs to the past, and the key is to grasp tomorrow ... "The teacher slowly enlightened me, and my enthusiasm filled my heart bit by bit. When I entered the classroom and opened the book, a piece of paper slipped quietly: "Don't lose heart, show confidence and courage, and everything will be fine." There is a long list of classmates' signatures at the signature office. I dry the tears left in my eyes and review with a smile. I am a strong person, and I can't let people who care about me down!
In the days of welcoming the senior high school entrance examination, I was accompanied by "licorice", "chrysanthemum" and "sun god", and I still studied hard under the lonely lamp. Behind me, there are teachers, classmates, parents and relatives who fully support me. I will live up to expectations and stubbornly sprint to the "finish line".
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Beauty is after school.
Attend classes, review and take exams; Class, review, examination, such a life seems too monotonous and boring. Don't! Besides intense study, I also have my own blue sky and fertile soil.
A week of intense study and life has passed. It goes without saying that on Saturday night, the moon is bright and the stars are thin, and the wind is crisp. The next morning, my father and I will definitely take a fishing rod and embark on a fishing trip in Qingpu.
When we come to the bank of the river pond, it is often before dawn. The deep night is like a blue curtain, inlaid with bright stars like pearls. The grass on the ground is slightly wet and soft as a carpet. Insects chirping in the grass make clear calls, which are particularly bright in silence. Occasionally, a golden carp jumps out of the water and ripples on the silver-covered river in the moonlight. Everything is so beautiful and pleasing to the eye.
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3. Appreciation of Excellent Full-Score Composition in Senior High School Entrance Examination (3)
I put down my fishing tackle and waited quietly. As time goes by, my hand aches before the fish is hooked. "Hey? How can such a light fishing rod be sour when held for a while? " I can't stop thinking. Oh! That's right. Holding a fishing rod in your hand is like a lever, and your hand is the fulcrum. Then the "dynamic moment" of this lever must be very short. Look, the end of the pole is so close to the hand. It turned out to be a standard "labor bar". No wonder it's so hard to get! So if the "dynamic moment" is lengthened, the force should be much smaller, right? I couldn't help moving my hand forward for a while. Sure enough, the fishing rod seems to be much lighter. I can't help feeling smug about this "small innovation". Suddenly my eyes lit up, wow! Not good! The float has sunk into the water. Pull! Pull! What can be pulled up is an empty hook.
I reloaded the bait and threw it hard. The fishing line drew a beautiful arc in the air and plopped into the water. After a while, the float remained motionless. I can't stop looking around. "Wow", my father suddenly raised the fishing rod, followed by the sound of "poop-poop", and then look at my father's fishing rod, the tip of which has been drawn into a half ellipse. "ah! Dad caught a big fish! " I threw down the fishing rod and rushed over in three steps. As expected, this is a big herring. I picked up the "sea bucket" and took a spin in the water. Wow, this fish weighs five pounds. Look at dad's fish basket. It's half full. I can't help asking, "Dad, how did you catch so many?" Dad smiled and said, "fishing, the position of the float is very important." Best of all, when the fishing line enters the water, four floats float on the surface of the water and three sink into the water, and the distance between each float is 4-5 cm. In this way, the buoyancy of floating objects in the water is just against the weight of lead bullets, and a certain distance is kept between floating objects, so that the process of fish eating bait can be seen at a glance. ……
I learned it from my dad. I moved the float. At the moment, a breeze blew and rippled on the river. Four snow-white ones are swaying in the green river, as if dancing a brisk ballet. Suddenly, the float sank, my heart suddenly closed, and then the float sank. When I gently lifted the pole, a whitebait jumped out of the water and plopped down on the grass by the pond. I looked up and saw a big and lively crucian carp weighing half a catty. I was sincerely happy and shouted, "Dad, I caught it, too!" " "At the moment, the weeping willows by the river fluttered gently with the wind, as if to congratulate me.
Sometimes, "something unexpected happens in the sky", the sun is completely covered by clouds, and the wind becomes no longer gentle. Whenever this time, my father will set up a "arbor" and observe the sky carefully. "Let's go! It's going to rain heavily! " If my father says so, I will immediately put away the fishing rod, pick up the fish I caught and leave the pond after my father. Soon, the rain will fall like beans. If dad picks up the fishing rod leisurely after observing the sky, it will be all right. I will be relieved and throw the fishing line smartly. ...
Whenever the afterglow of the sunset turns the grass across the street into a touch of gold, my father and I use fishing rods as "poles", hang a full fish basket in the middle, and we each set foot on our way home along the field path. In the sunset, not far away, green crops are nodding to me; In the distance, the smoke from the farmhouse waved goodbye to me. At this time, a childhood song swayed gently in my heart: "Our fields, beautiful fields ..."
[Comment] This article consists of eight natural paragraphs, each of which has a relatively centralized and independent meaning. For a while, I kept writing that I had my own after-school life, which was very fun. In the second paragraph, I pointed out that fishing is my extracurricular life. Three paragraphs, write about the beauty of the shore scenery. Four paragraphs, writing to improve the satisfaction of grip technology. In five paragraphs, write to my father for advice on fishing. Six paragraphs, write about my joy in catching fish. Seven paragraphs, write what we do when the weather changes. Eight paragraphs, writing about fishing late, harvesting a big mood. Three to eight paragraphs, devoted to the fun of fishing. The author divided the article properly and made a relatively complete meaning clear in one paragraph. Eight natural paragraphs, each with an independent meaning, connect these meanings to form an organic whole. In this way, the article is clear and easy for readers to better understand the content.
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Lessons from my family.
In the morning, I was lying in bed. Through the window glass, I saw the sky was gray and the wind was blowing. After a while, I heard raindrops fall to the ground. I stayed in bed and closed my eyes again.
"Tingting! Get up, it's almost seven o'clock! " Mom's shouts made me open my eyes again.
"Where is my father? Is he up? " I asked as I got up.
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Appreciation of Excellent Full-Score Composition in Senior High School Entrance Examination (Ⅲ)
"Your father bought a cake for his daughter! Get up and eat while it's hot! " It's dad's voice. Shit! I lost again today.
Dad is a warm-hearted man and speaks humorously. He loves his daughter very much, takes care of my mother and often helps her with housework. He loves me, but he often educates me. His way of educating me is not yelling or blowing his beard and glaring, but educating me in a joke. No, in order to make me get up early every day and cultivate my good habit of diligence, he not only set an example by himself and took the lead in getting up early, but also suggested that the whole family should hold an early morning competition. My parents also chose me as a statistician. This method really works. I won many championships. But today I lost!
"dad! Who is the champion today! " I asked my father after getting up.
Dad smiled and said, "naturally, she is a strong woman!" " Your mother got up earlier than me today. No, millet porridge is ready, come and eat! "
My mother brought me millet porridge and said, "If your father hadn't come back too late last night, he would be the champion today." I know mom always talks to dad.
Dad is busy getting dressed after breakfast. I ate and asked, "Dad! Why did you leave so early today? "
"I went to the city for a meeting today." Dad said while getting dressed.
Dad's words reminded me. Dad has a car to pick him up every time he goes out for a meeting. Now I am very happy. I swallowed a bowl of porridge and ate a cake of oil. Looking out the window, it was still raining, so I said, "Dad! It is raining outside. Drive me to school today! " Dad looked out the window and didn't answer.
Mom looked out of the window, too, and then said, "Yes! It's raining, let your father's car take you to school! " Dad still didn't say anything. I quickly kissed it and said, "Mom! Don't worry, my dad is a model dad and he will send me. " At this time, my father found my rain boots from under the bed and handed them to me and said, "Tingting, put on your rain boots. There is an umbrella behind the door. Go to school by yourself. Don't take the bus!" " I threw my rain boots on the ground angrily and said, "It's windy and rainy today. How can I get there? Otherwise I won't take your car! " "Dad a face of serious picked up the rain boots, and handed it to me. He asked, "My daughter is afraid of the wind?" I shook my head. He asked again, "Is my daughter afraid of rain?" Before I could answer anything, my mother seemed to realize something and immediately leaned down to encourage me and said, "My daughter is not afraid of anything! Let's go Go with mom! " I also understand something in my heart, and I am no longer angry. So, I left with my mother.
In the storm, our mother and daughter helped each other. Our umbrellas were red and green. In the storm, we blended in with the running crowd. Everyone's umbrella is woven overhead into a beautiful and colorful world.
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This paper selects two small things in daily life: one is to train children to get up early and parents to set an example; The other is to cultivate children who are not afraid of hardship. Parents should give priority to encouragement, be emotional and be rational. Although the incident is small, it reflects a profound and serious theme: how parents educate their children. Ordinary parents only pay attention to taking care of their children in life, always afraid that their children will suffer hardships, satisfy their children everywhere, create superior conditions for their children everywhere, and let them develop the ability of being spoiled, afraid of this and that, and lack independent life. Fortunately, the author of this article met a pair of good parents, who consciously cultivated their children to form good habits, exercised their children in the wind and rain, and prevented her from having the idea of taking advantage and being strong. Such a theme is a profound theme. It can be seen that whether the central idea of an article is profound or not does not depend on the size of the event. As long as you are good at digging, small things can also reflect profound ideological significance.
The author is good at digging the profound meaning of small things and making the finishing point. For example, "He loves me, but he often educates me. The way he educates me is not shouting, nor blowing his beard and glaring, but educating me in a joke. " This finishing touch writes the feeling of "I". I feel the love and care of my parents, as well as their strict requirements and careful cultivation. Therefore, I have faith in receiving education. This makes the center clear and profound.
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warmth
Today's classroom is particularly depressing. There is no previous reading sound, and there is no usual red-faced argument. Everyone felt very sad, because Wang Ming's father died when he was a child, and his mother died yesterday, leaving only him and his sister.
What a heavy blow this is! When the child needed maternal love, the mother left him prematurely because of cancer. This is the future life of Wang Ming and his sister!
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Appreciation of Excellent Full-Score Composition in Senior High School Entrance Examination (3)
In our class, happiness belongs not to one person, but to the whole class. The pain of losing Wang Ming's mother's love is not only his own, but the pain of the whole class. Wang Ming came in from outside. He wore a black veil on his arm and his eyes were red and swollen. He trudged into the classroom step by step. Everyone looked up at him and looked at him sitting in his seat. The whole morning, the whole class was particularly heavy.
At noon, after lunch, everyone gathered around Wang Ming. Some people looked at him with gratified eyes, some people hesitated and sighed, and some people patted him on the shoulder. Wang Ming stood up, walked to the door of the classroom, looked back at everyone, smiled at everyone and went out. This is not an ordinary smile, but a forced smile when a child loses his mother's love. In order to comfort everyone, he is afraid of affecting his classmates' study. This smile means that he can survive. I firmly believe that he will survive.
Everyone sat in silence for a long time, and suddenly someone said, "Let's donate money to Wang Ming!" " "Everyone replied with one voice:" Yes! All of us must provide for his graduation. "Ten cents, twenty cents, fifty cents, one yuan ... paper money was put in Wang Ming's pencil box. When Wang Ming came back, he looked at the money in his pencil box and at his classmates. They all smiled at him.
In the first class in the afternoon, many people put money on Wang Ming's desk and a notebook. Wang Ming opened his notebook. There is such a famous saying in the notebook: "Life is not a happy dinner, but a struggle and tribulation; Struggle again and suffer again. " There are also precious words from classmates in the book. With tears in his eyes, Wang Ming wrote at the end of his notebook: "I am a member of Class Kloc-0, Grade 3, and my heart will be integrated with fifty-three hearts ..."
At this moment, I felt an invisible force, that is love. When Wang Ming was frustrated, the whole class warmed his already cold heart with a heart of gold. What I see is not fifty-four students, but fifty-four hearts of gold, closely linked together. ...
[brief comment]
The title of this article "warmth" and the last article "care" actually belong to the same topic. Society, schools, families and people care about each other, love each other and help each other, which will bring warmth to people. As we said before, the center is the soul of an article and the author's writing intention. Clear center and concentration are the most basic requirements of a good article. The author of this article shows that Wang Ming's class is a United, friendly and warm class by writing that Wang Ming's mother has received care and help from the whole class after her death, expressing the author's love for the class and praising the spirit of unity and friendship. The author is good at expressing the meaning of the last paragraph of the central idea in incisive language, pointing out the center in vivid and incisive language, and vividly and accurately expressing the thoughts and feelings that the author wants to express. These are all worth learning.
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Show concern for
The sky is You Lan and wide.
In the narrow alley, I walked briskly with the money my mother bought me shoes, humming a song.
A blind man walked in front of me and poked me with a scout stick. I wanted him to go first, but he stopped. "Listen, you are a little girl, right? Can you do me a favor? " He almost begged, and I couldn't bear to leave. I couldn't help looking at the blind man carefully. He is over fifty years old, with gray hair, wrinkled forehead and moving lips, as if to say something. After a silence, he spoke: "Girl, I heard that there is a' Hope Project' now, right?" "Project Hope!" Donation activities for children who have dropped out of school in poor areas are in full swing. I also donated a lot of pocket money. The old man's words interrupted my thoughts: "Girl, is there this' project'?" "Oh, yes, you ..." I looked at him again: the old man was skinny and covered with almost rags. Doubt and sympathy swirled in my mind. However, I finally saw a powerful blow from the old man's left hand: "Yes! I also want to give my love to the children. " "Girl, can you take me?" My love for old people has crept into my heart. How can I refuse a disabled person's sincere concern for the next generation?
As soon as I got on Renmin Road, I led the old man to the donation office in Xiaoshiqiao. In the clearing in the southeast corner here, a donation desk has been built with several tables. There are nearly a hundred people in front of the donation desk. In this turbulent crowd, I suddenly found a child wearing a little red riding hood, raised his tender little hand, raised his heel, and laboriously handed the piggy bank to the staff of the donation office.
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Appreciation of Excellent Full-Score Composition in Senior High School Entrance Examination (Ⅲ)
I was fascinated by this scene until the old man pulled me. I helped the old man up again and stood in front of the donation desk. The old man fumbled to unbutton his coat, carefully took out a small cloth bag from his pocket, untied the wool rope, opened the cloth bag, solemnly put a stack of Great Unity on the donation desk, and then said happily, "Comrade, this is 300 yuan money, a little token of my appreciation. I am very close to the old man, and I can clearly see his inner beauty, kindness and sincerity. The simple words of the old man, together with his lofty qualities, are printed in my heart.
In a trance, I suddenly realized something, and quickly took out the money for buying shoes with body temperature and resolutely put it in the donation box.
At this time, I looked up and felt that the sky was bluer and wider.
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The title of this article has clarified the central idea. But the selection of materials is still very extensive. Parents' concern for themselves, teachers' concern for students, mutual concern among classmates, and mutual concern among people in society can all be used as materials to show the center of "care". The author cleverly chose the fact that he met a blind man on the road, and he asked me to take him to the donation office of "Project Hope" as the material. It has written a profound theme that the whole society cares about the growth of the next generation and shows the spiritual outlook of people in our time. It can be seen that the little author is good at observing life and thinking about life. Writing such a material is vivid and touching, giving people a refreshing feeling.
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dream
In my heart, there is always a beautiful wish buried, which may change with the growth of age, but will become stronger with the maturity of my mind. ...
When I was a child, I had a wish to be a painter. I took out the lucky money I had saved for many years, bought brushes and drawing paper excitedly, and signed up for the "primary Chinese painting class". I spread out drawing paper on the table and poured a lot of money. Suddenly, peaks and pine trees appeared under the brush. Step back from time to time to see the effect, just like an "old painter".
Just when I was in high spirits, my father called me: "I have been to your school, and I heard from the teacher that you fell from the tenth place to the fifteenth place in the last exam, which was a great step backwards!" " What are you drawing? Stop it now! "
So brushes and drawing paper were shelved, and "Chinese painting class" was changed to "extracurricular English class", and my wish was dashed. ...
Learning painting failed, and the desire to collect stamps sprouted again. I took the initiative to get the letter, in order to take down my favorite stamps and go around to collect stamps from relatives. It's really fun to see the homemade stamp album becoming more and more abundant and to see the whole world, ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign.
Just as I was crazy about collecting stamps, my father called me again: "How did you make such a mess again?" What kind of stamps do you collect? Can you go to college? " No stamp collecting! "
The stamp album was burned, and another wish was dashed. ...
Then there was a period of burying oneself in a book. By chance, I watched a movie about Li Siguang and dreamed of becoming a geologist. The pebbles I picked up from Taihu Lake and the volcanic rocks collected from Tianping Mountain were all thrown into the trash by my father, leaving me with only a thick stack of reference books. My wish was dashed again. ...
Dad, dad, all you have done is to realize your wish to let me enter the university, but do you know my wish?
Comments: The theme of this article is very profound. The author recalls the fact that his three wishes were stifled by his father on the grounds of being admitted to the university, which profoundly reflects the contradiction between the innocent desire of children and the desire of parents to succeed. This theme is enough to arouse readers' deep thinking.
The materials selected by the author reflect the common problems of parents under the current examination system. Many students may have this kind of experience, but because they are not good at thinking and accumulating, "things are rare", so they can't play well in the examination room and can't write real and touching articles.
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What a surprise
In the spring morning, the sun is shining and birds are singing in the branches. At this time, a pair of lovely swallows flew back from the south. They are looking around for a place to live.
Unexpectedly, they decided to nest under my roof. They are busy looking for grass and mud every day, and in a few days, the nest is built.
The cold winter is coming. They flew south for the winter. ...
The beautiful-looking swallow nest often makes me curious: what will this nest look like? One day, I finally couldn't resist the temptation. I found a ladder and asked my father to help me put it under the eaves.
That's it, okay?