Close? Keys? Words: 800 words on the second day of birthday.

Word count: 800 words composition

This article is suitable for: the second grade of junior high school.

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This composition is an 800-word composition about Grade Two. The title is "Birthday". Everyone is welcome to contribute. I was born in1February 2, 999. The lunar calendar is 1998 12 17. I have had my birthday twice a year since I was one year old. After the lunar birthday, I am waiting for the birthday of the solar calendar. This year, because my parents were too busy to remember, my mother suddenly realized that it was 65438+February 2008 18, saying that yesterday was Xie Kai's birthday, and asked me if I needed to make it up today. I said; "Wait for your birthday on February 2, 2009." As the days passed, 1 February morning, my father went to work. I stopped talking, but my father was hopeless. I want to see if my mother remembers this important day. At 4 o'clock in the afternoon, my father called my mother and said that tomorrow would be Xie Kai's birthday and he would order a cake for me. My heart is exulting. On the morning of February 2, my mother went to the cake shop to order a cake. I told my mother that the pattern of the cake wanted the tiger to chase the rabbit. Because today is my birthday, my mother can play computer 1 hour for me. At half past five in the afternoon, my mother and I went to the cake shop to get the cake. My uncle in the cake shop smiled and said, "Next time, I want to make it clear to my mother whether rabbits chase tigers or tigers chase rabbits!

"oh!

It turns out that my mother told my uncle in the cake shop that rabbits chase tigers!

Uncle opened the box and saw that it was really a tiger chasing rabbits. I took the cake box and went home happily with my mother. When I got home, I couldn't wait to open the cake box and the cake fell to the ground. I thought. Okay, okay, the cake is gone. Mother's voice sounded behind her. When I opened it, the cake changed, almost all the cream was gone, only the tiger's ass and tail were left, and the rabbit didn't know where to go. I lit the candle and whispered, "Happy birthday to me!

Happy birthday to me!

..... "Make a wish, blow out the candles and eat the cake, thinking that if my father is at home, he will definitely invite some classmates to accompany me for my birthday. Hey!

This birthday is just like this. Teacher's comment: The theme of this composition is birthday. The article comes from life, so the language is not so beautiful, but it is really interesting and well written. The narrative of the article is quite ups and downs, and a large number of spoken English in life are used to make the article more natural and cordial. I hope that the author will practice more in choosing words and making sentences in the future. The article "My mother suddenly realized it on the day of 65438+February 18, 2008" had better be changed to "My mother suddenly remembered it on the day of 65438+February 18, 2008". The word "suddenly realize" is not appropriate here. "Ask me if I need it today, and I will say;" There is one more word "no" in this sentence, and the semicolon should be a colon. Therefore, it is more accurate to change this sentence to "Ask me if I need to make it up today, and I said it". "Okay, okay, no cake" is changed to "okay, no cake". If Xie Kai can write more, practice more and observe life carefully, I believe he can write more excellent compositions. (Xue Le China Special Teacher: Teacher Zou Zi) February 25, 200919: 02: 00