This week's writing, the teacher assigned the topic "Remember that day". In the evening, we had a preliminary discussion on the composition materials. First, we need to decide which day to record. Tong Tong proposed two points: first, the day we went to Yang Zizhan's house; second, three good classmates were together at noon. I am inspired that since I remember that day, it should be very beneficial. I will leave a profound day in my memory and search in my mind whether there is a more memorable, meaningful and profound day in the near future than these two days. Tong Tong thought of cooking for my birthday some time ago. It really happened and was memorable.

Recently, we are learning to draw a writing mind map, that is, outline our writing ideas in the form of charts. First, you can structure the text layout, remember things smoothly and orderly, and be detailed properly; Second, we can develop the habit of divergent thinking, and consider problems not only from one point, but from multiple angles and levels; Third, it is also a good time to collect materials, although some materials need to be given and given, if you do it in the early stage, you can open up your composition ideas.

We do what we say, and writing a composition is not something that children particularly like to do. No, I just wrote an article "Technology changes life" the day before yesterday, and I continue to write it today. She is a little afraid of difficulties and asks me to draw a mind map with her. I said yes, you can draw the day from your point of view, and I will see what the difference is from my point of view. Mind mapping is really difficult for her according to a certain ideological order. This time, mind mapping is not as logical as last time. She lies down for a while, buries her head on the table for a while, and then takes the opportunity to tease me and ask me how to start. I said I was thinking, and she also said that she was thinking hard. In fact, I understand that she was only impressed by what she had done and led her to start cooking fried rice with eggs, so her mind map from preparing ingredients to stir-frying rice was relatively detailed. Later, she really didn't know how to start. I asked her to think about fried rice with eggs. Why did you cook fried rice with eggs this time? What do you think after cooking fried rice with eggs? As a result, she had the feeling that her mother was unhappy on her birthday and then ate, as well as the idea of night. The mind map she drew is as follows:

After the mind map is drawn, her writing ideas basically have an overall framework, and then she dictated according to her own mind map. I won't give her guidance on the first draft of her composition for the time being, so she can say it according to her own ideas. At this time, I took the opportunity to go to the living room to accompany Xiao Tong to watch his favorite educational TV, and the voice of Tong Tong's oral composition came from my ear. I gave her this space. I want to see if she has the ability to intersperse these materials as a whole when planning the layout of the article.

Indeed, as I expected, she really started with what she was most familiar with, focused on that night, first wrote about cooking, then wrote about the feeling of eating, and then wrote about my emotions and thoughts at night. She just listed the materials of the previous search in a simple order according to her own ideas.

It was a special day, my mother's birthday. First of all, I have to prepare ingredients. The ingredients include three spoonfuls of rice, diced cucumber, peanuts and two eggs. The next step is to wash rice and stew rice. After cutting vegetables and cooking, stir-fry rice and vegetables together, and the delicious fried rice with eggs will be finished.

I feel that my own cooking is so delicious that it is not easy for my parents to cherish it! I thought my gift to my mother was really special!

Mom, I don't know why I'm unhappy tonight. All these things I did were to make her happy. Maybe I was upset because I was busy with work. She ignored me and looked sad.

I feel that tonight, there is both a strange happiness and an unknown doubt.

The first draft of this article is really far-fetched. I gave her three points: First, this matter is concentrated in the evening, which does not meet the requirements of the article title, and one night does not mean a day; Second, let her look at her mind map again and consider whether she can take the development of things and emotional changes as the narrative order to see if there are any changes; Third, the article lacks detailed description and needs to do some work in the detailed section.

According to my prompt, Tong Tong browsed the mind map again, marked the composition order he wanted to express, that is, what to write first, then what to write, and then made a simple outline of how to transition between levels. She started by saying that I was unhappy on my birthday, what her birthday was like, and she wanted to make me happy. Then she used her cooking experience as a way to make her mother happy. After making a superficial adjustment, she gave an oral account again.

It was a special day, my mother's birthday.

I think birthday should be a festive and lively festival, but my mother's birthday is very deserted. Not many people come to celebrate her birthday with her. There is not a big cake on the table, but only empty dishes. My mother always says that she has no habit of celebrating her birthday. Why can't my mother celebrate her birthday? How happy and wonderful it is to have a birthday, and there is a big cake to eat.

I thought and thought and finally came up with a good idea. I'm going to cook fried rice with eggs for my mother. To cook fried rice with eggs, I have to prepare ingredients first. The ingredients are three spoonfuls of rice, diced cucumber, peanuts and two eggs. After washing rice and stewing rice, I went to cut vegetables and stir-fry dishes. At this time, the rice was stewed and cooled. Finally, the rice and vegetables were fried together, and the delicious fried rice with eggs was baked. It was delicious and delicious.

I'm so proud of my own cooking. Knowing that it's not easy for my parents to cook, I must cherish the food and not waste it. Today is my mother's birthday. This gift I gave my mother is really special!

somehow, there was both a strange joy and an unknown doubt that night.

after reading the second article she dictated, she created the emotional foundation in the early stage of the article, but the central part of the article was not detailed enough and there was no emotional change, and the ending did not echo the beginning of the article. It was still her divergent ideas. Maybe her composition was written at will, or maybe the adults were imprisoned too much, so I didn't know. I felt helpless. If I was in a hurry as before, I might step in for her. On the one hand, there is plenty of time this time, and on the other hand, I feel that if she keeps doing this, her promotion will be limited. Besides, I have to let her go and let her structure the article herself.

If I repeatedly deny her poor oral English and let her go on, I think she will be very impatient, so I said that Dad is not at home, so go and read with your brother. I'll stroke it first, and I can't write either. I'll think about it here and how to teach you to revise your composition. This time, Tong Tong and Xiao Tong were not angry because of trivial matters. I heard them discussing the book "Ocean" together in the bedroom over there. One spoke patiently, the other listened with great interest, asked questions from time to time, and moved another book "Life" to continue reading. I felt very gratified. I am also thinking hard in the bedroom here, trying to give her some advice. Based on the prototype of her article, I revised her composition as follows according to my ideas.

that day was a special day, it was my mother's birthday.

I remember that my mother was very unhappy that day. I don't know if it was because my mother was busy with work and tired physically and mentally, or something bad happened. My mother struggled and looked sad, and she didn't want to talk to me. I thought it would be a festive and lively festival to be born in Japan, with big cakes to eat, many friends to have fun with and birthday gifts to have. How can mom have this deserted birthday? I will try my best to give my mother a meaningful birthday.

I thought and thought and finally came up with a good idea. I want to cook a fried rice with eggs for my mother. This meal is simple and easy for adults, but it is difficult for me to cook for the first time. I didn't come home from school. I told my mother that I would learn fried rice with eggs. My mother promised to be there to guide me, and I did it myself. I first prepare the ingredients, three spoonfuls of rice, a cucumber, a small amount of peanuts and two eggs. Washing rice and stewing rice is very learned. Water should be put in moderation. My mother taught me to measure with my fingers. I use the time when I stew rice in the electric cooker to cut diced cucumber, stir eggs, fry eggs, stir-fry peanuts, stir-fry diced cucumber after the rice is stewed, then stir-fry the rice with eggs, peanuts and diced cucumber constantly, and after stirring evenly, the delicious fried rice with eggs is baked, which is really delicious in color, flavor and flavor.

First, I gave my mother a bowl and handed it to her personally. My mother kept nodding and praising while eating. It seems that my unhappy sadness has been blown away by my delicious wind. It seems that my special gift has had an effect.

I don't know why, that day I had an unknown happiness and an unknown doubt. I am happy to see my mother eating the rice cooked by herself. I am happy to know that labor is not easy and cherish food without wasting it. What is puzzling is that the world of adults is very complicated, which is really confusing.

When Dad comes back from his trip, we will start our composition overhaul project again. This time, we will adopt a divide-and-conquer strategy and revise it block by block. In the first part, she first caught me unhappy, she wanted to make him happy to describe and compare, and she quickly described what she thought. The second part is the process of cooking. I said that the cooking experience she described was simply piling up, which was neither new nor reflected the change of feelings, which made her think of the writing method of "Wu Shi Secret Roasted Chicken Wings", and completely regarded cooking as a game, which led to a collision of ideas. In the third part, she grasped the special gift characteristics for her mother, expressed some of her thoughts, and finally made it clear that she had an inexplicable happiness and unknown doubts. At this time, Tong Tong was already sleepy and tired, and gradually fell asleep in bed.

that day was a special day, it was my mother's birthday.

that morning, my mother was not happy at all. She didn't want to talk to me, didn't say much, and seemed to be thinking something. I think it might be because my mother was busy with work and upset. I think birthdays should be a festive and lively festival, with friends to celebrate birthdays, big cakes to share, many gifts to wait for and many blessings. I want to give my mother a unique birthday, which is different from others' birthdays to make her happy.

after much thought, I finally came up with a good way to make fried rice with eggs, which is the big meal for my mother's birthday. I gave Mi Xiaodi a bath first, and then put him in the "sauna room" for steaming. In this empty space, I fried the cucumber Ding Xiaozi hot, and then invited the peanut girls to fry in the oil pan repeatedly. Their clothes suddenly became golden red and shining brightly in the light. I then stirred the little sister egg evenly and turned it into golden yellow, and put it in the oil pan. Magical things happened, and the thin body of the little sister egg put on a fluffy yellow gauze skirt. At this time, Mi Xiaodi asked to let him out quickly. I quickly put Mi Xiaodi out in the arms of uncle wok and let him have a party with cucumber Ding Xiaozi, peanut and egg sister. When I carefully made it, my mother looked at me and guided me from time to time, and gradually showed a gratified smile on her face.

The egg fried rice with delicious color and flavor is finished. Our family enjoys this delicious food! It smells good. I did it!

I think this gift for my mother is really unique, which is different from others' gifts for my mother, such as clothes, cakes and so on, but my gift for my mother is fried rice with eggs cooked by myself.

I don't know why, that day I had a strange happiness and an indescribable doubt. I'm happy because I finally got the pleasure of working. I still have some puzzles that I can't solve. Those problems didn't really come to my mind, just a little impression, leaving some shadows.

I don't know whether Tong Tong likes the process of revising her composition in this way, but I enjoy it very much. When we choose composition materials, we always start with people and things around us to guide her to observe and feel life. You can also explore her inner world from these people and things around you, observe what she thinks and understand what she thinks; Take this opportunity to tell her that if you want to do something well, it will not happen overnight, but it needs to be brewed many times and it will take a long time.

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