Thinking of writing: Simplify task language directly. In narration, direct narration should be changed into indirect narration, and the language of characters should be simplified as much as possible. In this way, even if the plot is coherent, the sentence is "concise".

Mom and Dad told me that Yaohan was having an activity on February 3rd, 65438, and he could go shopping with vouchers. He also said that there were too many people in Yaohan two years ago, and everyone was shopping.

I listened, and I was curious. I often go to Yaohan. What will happen if there are more people? February 3 1 decided to experience it for yourself.

At half past seven that morning, I went out with my parents. When the car drove to the gate of Times Square, I saw a lot of people crowded at the gate of Yaohan, and it was dark. There are many cars parked on the road in front of Yaohan, waiting to enter the garage. The scene is really spectacular.

At 8: 05, we also walked into Yaohan, only to see a sea of people in the corridor. I hold my parents' hands tightly, and I am afraid that I will be squeezed out. I finally walked to the escalator and saw that the escalator was crowded with people and many security guards were in command. The crowd pushed up desperately. Wow, that's terrible.

I was a little scared, so I stood at a distance and watched and walked around. After a long time, the escalator was finally a little empty, so we went up. I saw people coming in and out of the counter, and I couldn't tell which ones were customers and which ones were salespeople.

Wow, so this is what adults have been talking about "shopping". It was really scary.